At the Cabin

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  1. henrytemp

    henrytemp Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Exactly. And while I've really been looking forward to the idea of Zack nailing Madison, I've enjoyed the whole "Madison keeps catching Gavin jerking off" story. And now with Brandon going behind Ashley's back i wonder if she won't do the same, with Zack or someone else. And Lisa's parents with Chloe/Kurt, again, so intrigued by the possibilities. And I'm leaving out a bunch of others. Very well written to create so many intertwining stories and possible outcomes.
     
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  2. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Hey there,

    I was wondering if anyone can suggest threads where Gavin ends up with another girl besides Heather and Taylor? Threads where he ends up with Chloe, Victoria, Lisa, Ashley or Madison.

    Thank you.
     
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  3. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    Well, there's my old main thread where he and Chloe became a couple, and henrytemp was doing one where Gavin was getting into a sorta threeway with Lisa and Heather to see if they could impress Chloe. Aside from that, there's the storyline I'm currently writing where I intend to pair Gavin with Victoria.
     
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  4. Cretan_Bull14

    Cretan_Bull14 Really Experienced

    There's also the "Orgy" threads we had going awhile back where Gavin ends up with Chloe in rather spectacular fashion.
     
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  5. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    Oh, yeah, I had forgotten about those. Good reminder!
     
  6. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Could you tell me how to find it? The name of the first thread or the name of the author? Also, Duskford could you please tell me which one is your old main thread?

    Thank you!
     
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  7. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    You can find my old main thread by starting off in the opening chapter and going forward until you're prompted to select Zack's roommate, then you have to select "Let fate decide" and then choose Heather. It's pretty much straightforward from there. I should warn you, though, there's more than 200 chapters and I put it aside, but there's some good scenes between Gavin and Chloe, they got to be an official couple.

    The orgy threads are off-shoots from my old thread as well, you should find them on the fifth day. There's two orgy branches, though, one done as a collaborative effort by Yarkoz, Patzo and myself, where Gavin sort of gets together with Taylor and the one Cretan_Bull14 did where Gavin gets together with Chloe.
     
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  8. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer


    The orgy thread where Gavin sort of gets together with Taylor, is the one where they play spin the bottle and Zack tells Gavin to do what he did before he came to the game with however he did it for 5 minutes and Gavin and Taylor start kissing, right?
     
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  9. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    Yep, it's that one.
     
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  10. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    Just for fun, I tried to come up with "shipper" names for the pairings in At the Cabin. Been compiling it for a while, and finished it today:

    Zack Bishop/Heather Ravers: Zeather, Hack, Heck, Zather, Raving Bishop, Captain Bishop
    Zack Bishop/Victoria Walker: Zaria, Zacky (because of of the nickname Vicky), Walking Bishop, Reporting Bishop, Crushing Bishop
    Zack Bishop/Chloe McRose: Zaloe, McBishop, Bishop of Roses
    Zack Bishop/Ashley Woodsen: Zaley, Zashley, Zackley, Woodshop
    Zack Bishop/Lisa Rivera: Lick
    Zack Bishop/Madison Cole: Zason, Mack, Mad Bishop
    Zack Bishop/Hannah Woodsen: Zannah, Hanck, Hack, Woodshop
    Zack Bishop/Taylor Bishop: Zaylor, Tack, Bishopcest
    Zack Bishop/Jennifer White: Zafer, Jenck, Zackifer, White Bishop, Ranging Bishop, Bishop Ranger
    Zack Bishop/Mary Moreau: Zary, Mack, Teaching Bishop

    Gavin Westher/Heather Ravers: Gather, Heavin, Captain Westher
    Gavin Westher/Victoria Walker: Vicvin, Gavia, Garia, Gacky
    Gavin Westher/Chloe McRose: Chlovin, Galoe, McWesther
    Gavin Westher/Ashley Woodsen: Galey, Ashvin, Westwood
    Gavin Westher/Lisa Rivera: Livin
    Gavin Westher/Madison Cole: Gason, Mavin
    Gavin Westher/Taylor Bishop: Gaylor, Galor, Tayvin, Tavin, West Shop
    Gavin Westher/Hannah Woodsen: Gannah, Havin, Hanvin, Westwood
    Gavin Westher/Jennifer White: Gafer, Jevin
    Gavin Westher/Mary Moreau: Gary, Mavin

    Brandon Cole/Ashley Woodsen: Braley, Branley, Ashdon
    Brandon Cole/Victoria Walker: Bracky, Vickydon, Victordon, Braria, Brania, Walking Quarterback, Reporting Quarterback
    Brandon Cole/Heather Ravers: Beather, Brather, Branther, Headon, Captain Cole, Captain Quarterback
    Brandon Cole/Chloe McRose: Braloe, Chlodon, McCole, Quarterback of Roses
    Brandon Cole/Lisa Rivera: Bransa, Lidon
    Brandon Cole/Madison Cole: Branson, Maddon, Mad Quarterback, Colecest
    Brandon Cole/Taylor Bishop: Bralor, Braylor, Taydon, Taylon
    Brandon Cole/Hannah Woodsen: Brannah, Handon, Hadon
    Brandon Cole/Jennifer White: Brannifer, Jendon, White Quarterback, Ranging Quarterback
    Brandon Cole/Mary Moreau: Brary, Madon, Coreau, Teaching Quarterback, Quarterback Teacher

    Kurt Johnson/Chloe McRose: Kuloe, Chlurt, McJohnson
    Kurt Johnson/Heather Ravers: Kuther, Keather, Heart, Hurt, Raving Johnson, Captain Johnson
    Kurt Johnson/Victoria Walker: Kuria, Koria, Kucky, Walking Johnson, Reporting Johnson
    Kurt Johnson/Ashley Woodsen: Kuley, Kushley, Kashley, Johnsen
    Kurt Johnson/Lisa Rivera: Kusa, Kursa, Kisa
    Kurt Johnson/Madison Cole: Kurtson, Mad Johnson
    Kurt Johnson/Taylor Bishop: Kaylor, Tart
    Kurt Johnson/Hannah Woodsen: Kannah, Hart, Johnsen
    Kurt Johnson/Jennifer White: Kufer, Kafer, Jert, Ranging Johnson

    Heather Ravers/Ashley Woodsen: Healey, Ashther, Asher, Cheers, Captain Woodsen
    Heather Ravers/Victoria Walker: Hearia, Hecky, Victher, Raving Walker, Walking Captain, Captain Walker, Raving Reporter
    Heather Ravers/Chloe McRose: Heloe, Cheather, Chlother, McRavers, Raving Rose, Captain of Roses
    Heather Ravers/Lisa Rivera: Lither, Heasa, Captain Rivera
    Heather Ravers/Madison Cole: Heason, Madher, Raving Mad, Captain Cole
    Heather Ravers/Taylor Bishop: Healor, Haylor, Tather, Taher, Tayler, Raving Bishop, Captain Bishop
    Heather Ravers/Hannah Woodsen: Hennah, Hather, Captains
    Heather Ravers/Jennifer White: Heafer, Jether, Ranging Captain, Captain White, White Captain, Ranger Captain
    Heather Ravers/Mary Moreau: Hery, Heary, Mather, Teaching Captain, Captain Moreau, Raving Teacher

    Victoria Walker/Ashley Woodsen: Vickley, Viley, Vishley, Ashia, Ashria, Ashy, Besties, Blondies
    Victoria Walker/Chloe McRose: Chloria, Viloe, Walking Rose, McWalker, Reporting Rose, Reporter of Roses
    Victoria Walker/Lisa Rivera: Visa, Liria, Licky
    Victoria Walker/Madison Cole: Vison, Vicson, Maria, Mad Reporter, Mad Walker
    Victoria Walker/Taylor Bishop: Vilor, Victor, Taylia, Tayria, Walking Bishop, Reporting Bishop
    Victoria Walker/Hannah Woodsen: Vinah, Vicah, Vickah, Haria, Hannaria, Hacky, Hatoria
    Victoria Walker/Jennifer White: Vickfer, Walking Ranger, Ranging Walker, Reporting Ranger, White Reporter, White Walker
    Victoria Walker/Mary Moreau: Vickry, Marya, Walking Teacher, Teaching Walker, Teaching Reporter, Reporting Teacher

    Ashley Woodsen/Chloe McRose: Ashloe, Chley, McWoodsen
    Ashley Woodsen/Lisa Rivera: Liley
    Ashley Woodsen/Madison Cole: Ashson, Madley
    Ashley Woodsen/Taylor Bishop: Ashlor, Taley, Tayley, Woodshop
    Ashley Woodsen/Hannah Woodsen: Ashnah, Ashah, Haney, Haley, Hashley, Woodcest, Woodsencest
    Ashley Woodsen/Jennifer White: Ashfer, Asher, Jenley, Jeley
    Ashley Woodsen/Mary Moreau: Ashy, Ashry, Maley

    Chloe McRose/Lisa Rivera: Liloe, Chisa, Chlisa, McRivera
    Chloe McRose/Madison Cole: Chloson, Madoe, McCole, Mad Rose
    Chloe McRose/Taylor Bishop: Chlor, Taloe, Tayloe, McBishop, Bishop of Roses
    Chloe McRose/Hannah Woodsen: Chlannah, Haloe, Hanoe, McWoodsen
    Chloe McRose/Jennifer White: Chlofer, Jenoe, Jeloe, McWhite, Ranger of Roses, White Rose
    Chloe McRose/Mary Moreau: Chlary, Chary, Maloe, McMoreau, Teacher of Roses

    Lisa Rivera/Madison Cole: Lison, Besties
    Lisa Rivera/Taylor Bishop: Lilor, Lisor, Tayla, Taysa
    Lisa Rivera/Hannah Woodsen: Linah, Hansa
    Lisa Rivera/Jennifer White: Lifer, Jensa, Jennisa
    Lisa Rivera/Mary Moreau: Liry, Lary

    Madison Cole/Taylor Bishop: Malor, Maylor, Madlor, Tayson, Taylon, Mad Bishop
    Madison Cole/Hannah Woodsen: Madah, Hannison, Hanson
    Madison Cole/Jennifer White: Mader, Madfer, Jenson, Jennison, Jennon, Mad Ranger
    Madison Cole/Mary Moreau: Mady, Mason, Coreau, Mad Teacher

    Taylor Bishop/Hannah Woodsen: Tannah, Taynah, Hanor, Haylor, Besties, Woodshop
    Taylor Bishop/Jennifer White: Tafer, Tayfer, Jenor, Jeylor, Ranging Bishop, Bishop Ranger, White Bishop

    Hannah Woodsen/Jennifer White: Hafer, Hanfer, Jennah, Jeah
     
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  11. Zingiber

    Zingiber Really Really Experienced

    Woodshop!
     
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  12. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    LOL, all Woodshops are great pairings!


    On another note, figured I should come here and leave an update about my current plans. I'm doing a remake of my old main thread, adding some scenes and removing unnecessary plots. It's being different in the sense that Zack won't be split between Heather and Victoria as he was in the old version, since he's going to be hooked in Heather way sooner, giving the way they're already having lots of sex; another plot is the bear costumes one, I'm thinking about removing it completely, but if I keep it, it'll be just a minor plot, only affecting Gavin and Victoria, probably. The pairings for this are going to be Zack/Heather, Gavin/Victoria, Kurt/Chloe, Brandon/new character, and Ashley will be with both Zack and Heather, and Taylor, Hannah, Jennifer and Mary will also make appearances. Peter, Dustin, Shawn and Kendra won't appear (Peter still might, but I don't have any ideas for him at the moment. I guess he could show up and end up with Taylor, but that'd mess up my plans of having an epilogue scene featuring a threeway between Zack, Heather and Taylor). I'm currently writing the second day of this story.

    I also found a way to make Azure Rocks Chronicles work into a shorter story and give an ending to it as well. I'm going to take the last branch on the Story Map (the one where Victoria interviews Zack in the locker room instead of being tricked into that semi-gangbang) and spin it into a story about the week leading to Ashley's birthday party, which is gonna close the story and take place at Ravers Cabin. This one will be a Zack/Victoria story, but I'm not sure about the other pairings yet, just that Heather won't be paired with a single character 'cause she will be way more of a nymphomaniac in this.

    I think that if every week, I work three days on a story and three days on the other, I can eventually finish both.
     
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  13. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer


    The plans for both stories sound great! If i might make a suggestion. I think that for Azure Rocks Chronicles it would be great to see Gavin paired up with Ashley (if some how she breaks up with Brandon and is a freak like in several threads from "At the Cabin"; it would be great to see him get wild with Ashley) Madison (because her no-bullshit attitude and forward personality would do Gavin some good), Lisa or Taylor (if you want to add her to the story :D). Chloe i imagine will end up with Kurt if he makes an apperance or you could introduce the character of Nikki from "The Cabin at Silver Lake" and pair Chloe with her.

    Good luck and happy writing.
     
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  14. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    Thanks! Ashley for Gavin in Azure Rocks Chronicles sound like the safest bet right now, since Brandon is a jerk to Gavin there, it'd be almost like poetic justice. There's a slight problem with Madison in ARC, unlike in 'At the Cabin', where she was Brandon's twin, in ARC she's ten months younger than him, making her 17 and unable to be featured in sex scenes (I'm going to see if I can edit it without messing too much dialogue). Lisa will be pretty pissed off with the whole gang when she catches Zack with Vicky, so she won't appear too much on the story. I'll weave Taylor and Hannah into the story too. About Chloe, I'm still deciding what to do with her, but Nikki is a good suggestion. Kurt, on the other hand, it's very possible that he won't show up on this, since the story won't take place during a school/college break, and I'll already coming up with a weird excuse to have Taylor and Hannah in town during the week.

    Gavin with Ashley opens up the possibility of a threeway with Hannah. Can't believe no one did this yet, lol, a guy with both Woodsen sisters (I briefly did it in that orgy thread, but it almost doesn't count. I'm talking about just the three of them in a nicely built scene).
     
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  15. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Gavin and Ashley would be fantastic, like you said poetic justice. And to have Gavin have a threesome with the Woodsen sisters, before Brandon and with a childhood crush of his and Zack would be awesome.
     
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  16. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    Yep, although Zack probably gets Hannah first and Gavin has a go with Taylor before they settle down with future girlfriends. Thinking about having a scene in the same vibe as boomer97 did, that one with the hot tub, but with Zack there as well, in the Bishops' backyard. Hannah gravitates towards Zack and Taylor to Gavin, and then eventually they start getting it on, either in front of each other or with both couples going to a separate room. The threeway between Gavin/Ashley/Hannah would happen either at Ravers Cabin at the end of the story or in an epilogue scene.
     
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  17. Zingiber

    Zingiber Really Really Experienced

    Though I'd still love to see a Chloe And Her Harem group: ChloZackTher? GavRoZack?
     
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  18. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    Agreed, Chloe and her boys would also be a great scene. I'd call it McHarem or Harem of Roses, lol.

    Maybe a scene with the three of them and Taylor and Hannah coaching the whole thing so they don't mess it up.
     
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  19. Arminius

    Arminius Guest

    Just a thought, but i think it would be great if there was a thread in which Gavin ends up with Heather, i am not talking just having sex with her once and maybe more in the future like in Boomer97 thread (which is great by the way), but a real, long term stable realationship. I think Heather could have a good influence on Gavin, giving him more confidence and getting him out of his shell. Plus, considering that Heather is somewhat wild and a bit of a freak, the sex scenes could be awesome. Not that i'm complaining that in Boomer97 thread Gavin will end up (i hope) with Taylor, given their mutual attraction and the fact that he just realised that Heather is not interested in a relationship at the moment.
     
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  20. Duskford

    Duskford CHYOA Guru

    And I crashed and burned again. Planning a story sounds easy, but when you have a lot of free time as I've been having lately, it doesn't take too long to find out if you'll be able to pull it off or not. I've been spending hours staring at my keyboard and screen trying to transform those plans into scenes, and while I had a dream to finish a story with those characters for a little more than two years now, the happiness of writing for this story just isn't here anymore as it was two years ago, so it's time to admit things aren't working as they are now and admit defeat. The current setup doesn't work anymore, I don't see the characters working as they're supposed to do anymore, and that prevents me from making the overall plot work well. I don't know if I'm trying too hard to weave in a good plot into what is supposed to be just a sex story and that's what is messing things up for me, well, I'm just not sure.

    I'm going back to the working table and do a major rework on all the characters, the relationships between them and how they connect with each other. Some of them might be unchanged, some might suffer a few changes, some might even get cut completely. The one thing I know is that when I come back with whatever conclusion I reach, the focus will be entirely on the main character, as the quest game and a few tests with 1st person scenes on Azure Rocks Chronicles showed me, my writing flows way better when I focus on just one character. Nowadays, my writing just freezes when I have to shift the focus from Zack and write scenes with the other male characters, so I won't be making that mistake again.

    At the Cabin and Tales of Silver Lake will always stay open as they are for old and new writers to contribute with the amazing threads they always did, and I'll be continuing with the quest version of At the Cabin as well, it received more of a response than I could ever hope for. However, Cabin at Silver Lake was deleted and Azure Rocks Chronicles will be cleaned to receive the new version, if or when I manage to make one.