The horror stories of the Black Hollow city

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by majus, May 6, 2017.

  1. majus

    majus CHYOA Guru

    So I started a horror series - The horror stories of the Black Hollow city.

    Ideas for stories (discounting the ones in the introduction):

    -Writer, a story about a horror writer who came to Black Hollow. Currently being written. The plot takes some (just some) inspirations from the movie 'In the Mouth of Madness'. Planned 2 endings.
    -Asylum, where the patients are healed through sex, electricity and sex toys. Plot inspired by Shutter Island.

    I'm looking for contributors, story ideas and an appropriate image for the cover.

    Wanna help?
     
    Last edited: May 7, 2017
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  2. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Yes, and no. I want to help very much, but I'm afraid I have to add Horror stories to the list of content I'm no good at...
     
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  3. LizardGod

    LizardGod Really Really Experienced

    Added a little something to it
     
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  4. majus

    majus CHYOA Guru

    I appreciate the though.

    It has a promising start - I wonder how you will develop it...
     
  5. TheDespaxas

    TheDespaxas Really Really Experienced

    I might contribute if I get an idea devious enough.
     
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  6. Sthaana

    Sthaana Really Experienced

    Well, since we´re talking about a sleepy-but-creepy New England town, I think at least one story about witchcraft is needed...
    Maybe you could go way back and tell the story of settlers, a bit like the film "The VVitch". But with fucking.

    I would be interested in contributing, but at the moment I can onlythink of an Asylum story, and I wouldn´t want to preemtively steal your ideas, so I´ll wait and see what you end up doing with your take on it. Or until I come up with something different.
     
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  7. LizardGod

    LizardGod Really Really Experienced

    Managed to get a new pair of chapters put up
     
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  8. GenericEditor168

    GenericEditor168 Really Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Would anyone mind if I added a serpent-folk path?
     
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  9. majus

    majus CHYOA Guru

    Be my guest, just keep it in horror setting.
     
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  10. Sthaana

    Sthaana Really Experienced

    I´ve started working on the Haunted House story, if it´s OK with you. I´m a bit busy irl at the moment, so it might take a while, I hope you don´t mind...
     
  11. GenericEditor168

    GenericEditor168 Really Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Oh, that won't be hard... They're Lovecraft Originals... ****, that sounds like some sort of creepy clothing brand.
     
  12. LizardGod

    LizardGod Really Really Experienced

    So I may have slightly forgotten about this one but got two new chapters up and I think I actually know where this story is going now.
     
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  13. Sthaana

    Sthaana Really Experienced

    Hey, no offence meant, but perhaps we could change the title to just "Horror Stories of Black Hollow City", I feel like it sounds a bit more natural that way, what do you guys think?
     
  14. majus

    majus CHYOA Guru

    Non taken. English is not my native language so I might have missed some 'unnatural' sounding of the title.
    What the rest of you think? Does "Horror Stories of Black Hollow City" sound better than "The horror stories of the Black Hollow city"?
     
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  15. LizardGod

    LizardGod Really Really Experienced

    Yeah I think that would work better.
     
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  16. majus

    majus CHYOA Guru

    I changed the title - sorry for delay, but I was away.
     
  17. LizardGod

    LizardGod Really Really Experienced

    I would also suggest maybe changing the cover photo to something a bit more sexual.

    I have found that having the right cover pic really helps boost the number of people reading your story.

    I don't dislike the current cover, just suggesting ways to maybe boost the number of people seeing the story.
     
  18. majus

    majus CHYOA Guru

    While I fully agree, there is one problem: finding such a pic - and believe me, I searched for something spooky and sexy (at the same time) and it ain't easy to find.
    But if you have proposition/idea - I'm more than happy to see it:)
     
  19. LizardGod

    LizardGod Really Really Experienced

    here are some of the random images I have on my pc.
    http://imgur.com/a/k6qqT
    I think I have some more but my hardrives are a mess.

    With the kind of open ended style of the story I would go with something that is maybe more suggestive. (The Incase one of the woman posing in the link is the one I would use) than going for out and out sex.
     
  20. majus

    majus CHYOA Guru

    The one with the group sex/debauchery and the floating book/magic has potential...
    I considered this pictures:
    http://imgur.com/a/N1ukx