So, I decided to start my own story, might be fun, have no idea how to stay motivated. https://chyoa.com/chapter/Introduction.565111 It's a skyrim fanfic. Would love some critiques on what to do better. Going to be entering some Feminization territory as the story progresses
It's a little short right now to give much feedback. I'm sort of intrigued by the slave wearing a dress (maybe a little more description there?), but other than that you haven't really presented a strong "hook" for readers just yet. Personally, I might recommend you replace "[splat]" with "SPLAT" or "splat", since the brackets take readers out of the story a bit.
what slave do you mean? The only person I've explicitly referenced wearing a dress was Sheogorath himself.
Ah...okay, I misunderstood, when you wrote: I mistook the subject in the second sentence ("He") as "the worm," not Sheogorath.
