It was really fun, and I really liked Shawn's "THIS IS THE BEST SHIT EVER, WHERE'S MY PHONE?" reaction. I'm sure Kurt is like "Holy shit, where did that come from, Heather?! I know you liked the new movie, but god damn, I didn't think Chris Pratt spoke to your inner dinosaur" as he helps her out of the shower. Patzo, as long as Taylor dresses up as Tina Turner, I'm sated, lol.
"Velociraptor is my spirit animal, you wouldn't understand." And I was thinking Jennifer in the Tina Turner role. Her park, her rules.
The idea is yours if you want it, Patzo, I imagine it'd be quite fun and hot to see it get developed. An image of Vicky and Lisa battling it out passed through my mind now, LOL. About my turn on the orgy thread, I'll say beforehand that it'll be a quite long scene, since there'll be four mini-scenes inside it. But it'll all be in the same dare, Lisa kinda went overboard.
Please, use that line at some point, lol. And of course! Duh! She's had it with everyone bonking around her and running into Zack with yet another girl and she's like "Okay, that's it. Time to end this once and for all." Sounds awesome, duskford! Lisa's targeting system went wide, right? lol
Indeed, Yarkoz! Lisa's been angry with Zack ever since she saw him entering the cabin with Chloe, then she noticed how Heather and Vicky also were angry and how embarrassed Chloe was in the last thread, so an idea to distance him even further from these girls came to her.
Been in a rut. Real busy the last month and little time to put my mind to writing. Then when I was finally free, I started feeling worn out on these characters. I tossed around the idea of starting a whole new thread with new characters on the Silver Lake story, but decided to instead get myself back on track on my main thread. One of the tough things for me is knowing certain points I want to get to, but then realizing how far I am from writing that chapter. So I've decided to just start scribbling out threads in notepad without the pressure of hitting publish. I realize most people probably do it that way anyway but I've always typed my first draft on chyoa (my process is to work the scene out in my head until I'm ready to type. type it out. walk away for a bit. then return to it and edit it. Working it out in my head is the longest part- hours, days, weeks sometimes) Anyway I know what I want to happen the next "day" in my main story, just need to sort out the details. however I'm rethinking some of my plans in order to maybe explore new relationships. Something funny, the line that was written in the orgy storyline where Lisa says about Zack "His big dick" is a line I was planning to have her say in an upcoming scene about someone else. Duskford- The Hannah-Zack scene was great. I waited until it was all posted so I could read it in one sitting. It was definitely worth the wait. On sex scenes (since you mentioned it) it's strange since I am writing on an erotica site but i feel that's my weakest writing. I hope to have some new threads up by the weekend, maybe sooner
henrytemp, that always bothered me as well, planning future scenes and then having to write my way up to them. My Zack/Hannah scene is an example of that (thanks for the feedback, by the way). Sex scenes, for me, are almost always tiresome to write. Oddly enough, I like to build characters and plots more than it.
Same, and as a reader the buildup is far more interesting to me than the actual sex acts. I remember this from Dusk till Dawn 2- Jesus: This movie is very low quality. Ray Bob: Don't look that bad to me. Jesus: There's no story. Bucky: It's a fuck movie. I don't watch a fuck movie for the story. I watch a fuck movie to see fuckin'. C.W.: I got to side with Jesus on this one. I personally appreciate an attempt at telling a story. When I care more about the characters, I care more about the fuckin'.
Heads up, about 60% done with the next orgy thread, so I'll have it up by tomorrow night after a pruning. Writing a flustered Zack is too much fun EDIT: Slightly later than I wished, but it's here! I may end up editing the ending slightly, but that's a problem for a less sleep-deprived me -- http://chyoa.com/story/at-the-cabin/thread/zack-hits-bedrock-with-gavin-1b5c5128
Posted the thread with Zack's moment of reflection after having sex with Hannah. Hope I didn't ramble too much and made at least some sense.
Clothing status for the orgy thread updated after Patzo's newest thread: http://forum.chyoa.com/threads/at-the-cabin.65/page-27#post-2957
On the orgy thread, expect my reply sometime tomorrow I hope -- took me a while to generate a thread idea, but I got one. Question though, how long do we want to keep Shawn in play?
Well, Yarkoz, the idea we've had was for him to fall asleep just before the actual orgy began, but if you have a creative idea, I guess you can use it.
I think he's too far gone at this point, so I'm not planning anything else for him. If you've got something in mind, you're welcome to him.
Right, I remember duskford, though given how we've been writing him lately, he seems to be fading quite quickly. I was just wondering if any of you guys had any plans for him further before I decided to write the scene, since Shawn could theoretically be involved in it. Thanks for the input guys! I'll finish it after classes today -- it's about 60% done, and I need to think a bit more about its end. Shawn is such a challenging and frustrating personality, lol
I don't have any plans for him either. You're welcome to deal with him, then, lol. Looking forward to it!
Okay, uh... sorry for the double post. I had a hard failure on Thursday, and recovering things hasn't gone well. Multiply that with other things, and... yeah, well, here we are. I lost the draft for the orgy thread, along with a bunch of other things. At least I have a restored laptop I guess. Ugh. I'll post it when I can, I remember how it went. Such a complete pain when you have to rewrite something from memory, it's never as good as it used to be in my opinion.
