Marcie and Gina read CHYOA

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Gambio, Jan 24, 2021.

  1. Warden-Yarn15

    Warden-Yarn15 Really Really Experienced

    Just a question:

    I know that the front page says that there's a required limit of 10 chapters, but would a 7 chapter story be alright? It's around 7300 words if what Google Docs is to be believed.

    That and it's somewhat of an experimental non-erotica story.
     
  2. Cuchuilain

    Cuchuilain Guest

    I think low chapter count is fine. However, I did one myself with similar numbers and it didn't do too well in comparison to some other stuff that I've put out. I think the reason was that it didn't get enough exposure due to the number of new drops. As a result number of views was low which feels like a shame if you've put the effort in.
     
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  3. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    That is a tricky question. I did feature stories below the 10 chapter requirement before. Hell "Omniworld" was basically just one chapter. But I also don't want to compromise on the 10 chapter rule too much, with the backlog as long as it is.

    I'd say if the story is finished I can slot you in. Segment might be shorter then usual tough, depending on how much material there is.
     
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  4. Warden-Yarn15

    Warden-Yarn15 Really Really Experienced

    I suppose that's fair enough, I also believe in artistic freedom so I'd rather not force anyone to write a 5000 word essay about, say, potatoes, so I'm ok with a short segment.

    But here you go: Bad Ends - An Untitled Horror Story. Have fun belittling it when you get the chance.
     
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  5. Cuchuilain

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    Got an observation of my own that I'll pass on if thats ok- (as I already mentioned, I'm a fan of the work), ...
    "Dogs and sleds? Miss Wilcox my dear, we'd all probably freeze if we had only brought alone dogs and sleds. Who knows just how far the North Pole truly is, as it could possibly take days or weeks until we would see it and we might possibly be the sled dogs by the time we're at our return journey if we're lucky."

    Every naval officer of any nation at that point would be able to pinpoint with very precise accuracy by means of compass and artificial horizon exactly how far north they were, and would know how far the pole was to within a mile (and if they had a watch too, exactly how far east or west they were). And the most successful voyages, were dog and sled.
    On foot they would have had the difficulty of pack drift to cover though, meaning that the ice cap isnt fixed to anything and moves, so if they walked say 20 miles in a day, the pack could actually move 20 miles in the other direction, leaving them exactly where they started. (or they could get lucky and cover 40 miles for walking 20 if it moved in the other direction)

    Unexplainable should maybe be inexplicable.

    I've got a fair idea of the answer, but going to ask the question anyway - its an excellent work, but why not post it on a non-erotic site?
     
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  6. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Gotcha, added you. If it is non erotic you can bet there will be plenty of belitteling.

    With this we actually hit the cap on the backlog , so submissions will be closed until further notice.
     
  7. Warden-Yarn15

    Warden-Yarn15 Really Really Experienced

    Ooh, extra spicey. This should be fun.
     
  8. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    Submissions may be closed, but Masochist Mode is still open...and I haven't reviewed any of Gambio's own stories yet!
     
  9. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru


    Oh no
     
  10. Unknown7

    Unknown7 Really Experienced

    Aside from whats in Gambio's signature there is also Reverse Uno Card from Cursed Punishment and Southern edge of Northjunan, Kingdom of Elenna from I Don't Want To Be A Slave Owner.
     
  11. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

  12. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

  13. Unknown7

    Unknown7 Really Experienced

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  14. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    I mean, every porn website has that

    I personally prefer sad panda, but Rule 34 is more well known.
     
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  15. Unknown7

    Unknown7 Really Experienced

    Really? Usually, they go with chicks with giant dicks?
     
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  16. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    Some of the chicks have no dicks at all! Utter degeneracy, I tell you what...
     
  17. Unknown7

    Unknown7 Really Experienced

    It is quite cliche.
     
    Last edited: Sep 6, 2021
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  18. Cuchuilain

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    I prefer my cliches loud.
     
  19. Unknown7

    Unknown7 Really Experienced

    It turned out that I copied the Gamer too much when writing that story. I thought I was being original but I fucked up really badly. I really thought I had changed it enough but a lot of people have noticed a lot of similarities. I tried fixing them but there's just too many so I decided to delete it all.
     
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  20. Cuchuilain

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    ... thanks 7 - I've used this name on webcam sites for years now and it makes more sense there. Doesn't make a lot here. I have thought about changing it, but there's identity built into it and its me dammit.