You need to make sure your threads end on a "What do I do next?"-style question, rather than a "What happens to me now?"-style question. Like "I'm saved, for the moment" as the lead-in and "When and where do I wake up?" as the ending question are both not fitting.
I really enjoy your work, and will gladly approve (and help edit) any contributions that fulfill the basic rules for submissions. Please use the thread here on the forum (in Author's Hangout) to collaborate further, as I am willing to flesh out any sections that require more detail, just so all authors are on the same page regarding consistency.
I approved 2 of the 6 threads. My ultimate goal with the story is to keep the number of supernatural elements to only "witch" powers that are already described, and that the final questions should be "What should I do now?" or some other decision that the character makes at a branch point. I will go in for further edits on threads after I approve them.
Please read the comments I have left on your contributions to my story, "An Evil Witch in the Modern World". There are some edits that you must meet before I can approve any more of your contributions.
