Recent content by DoAdventures

Hello all, It's been a while.... probably about three years actually since I've been properly active on the site and here because I've been working on new projects or trying to find ways to monetize my writing. I've gone from making my own app (several iterations), which started out really...

Happy to assist where I can?

Hello all, Thank you for taking the time to read this. I along with an incredibly talented writer have begun writing a new story. The Lines We Cross. It is a story I’ve thought about for a very long time and now thanks to the amazing and beautiful (Saskia Darling) has become a reality...

Hey Gorean, So not had a chance to read it all but there are a couple of things I've picked up. The perspective seems to change from POV to third person on the first chapter and on the third chapter of the head girl branch. That's all I have so far but I like he premise of the story, the...

I love it! Can I use it!

I go with option 3 all the time, that just how it rolls :) I flit around 4 or 5 stories at a time though - might be frustrating for the readers at times but it's the best I get out of myself

Hi Ben, First of all, apologies for the late reply but thank you very much for the detailed response. I wasn't sure how the forth wall breaking would be taken but can understand exactly what you mean. It was initially to add another flavour and to give it a try (Entirely different to...

Story : https://chyoa.com/story/Starlight-Shimmer.19308 Hello all, Whoring it out again for some feedback, what do people think of the pace so far? I'm enjoying telling the story and there is a bit more to come, especially from the political mess that will escalate but what about breaking the...

I agree and understand, as I say those chapters have been deliberately vague about the characters, but I hope I've put enough of a description in the following chapters, their dress sense for one thing trying to paint a picture

Yes those stories shouldn't exist on the site

Pictures or no pictures? Hello all, I didn’t want to spend to long on outlining character traits in the branch, link below; so I’ve deliberately tried to leave it open to interpretation but I’m wondering how it reads and if it does need images? Even just a chapter thrown on to show what they...

I would like to have a look and see if it's something I could perhaps add value to?