Marcie and Gina read CHYOA

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Gambio, Jan 24, 2021.

  1. Iam_DickMan

    Iam_DickMan Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

  2. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    not yet, gotta wait until Marcie and Gina do a segment on your story first
     
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  3. RejectTed

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    Jess watched enraptured as Aurora selected an item from the platter of appetizers. Her mistress slowly pealed away the wax wrapper, then held the wax to the flame of her lighter until it began to melt. Jess whimpered weakly; each molten droplet made her flinch and helplessly tug at her bonds. As the sticky red blobs bite into her right breast, the naked snack was held against her collar-bone. It's touch was cool, yet it was warmed quickly by her own thundering heart. It was firm with just a little give, much like an erect nipple, much like her erect nipples. Jess's breath quickened; she hoped so desperately that Aurora's nipples were hard too, beneath the leather. Please, be enjoying this as much as me.

    Aurora withdrew the soft food from Jess's skin and moved it towards the submissive's mouth. Jess licked her lips and pleaded as the off-white morsel approached. She needed to nibble on it, to lick and suck, and thereby, prove her mouth talented enough to dine on Aurora's pussy. But at the last second the opportunity was snatched away from her. Aurora held the small wheel in front of Jess's face, so close, yet so far. "Say it," she finally spoke. Her face twisted with a cruel smirk as she demanded the impossible. "Admit cheese is the sexiest food."
     
  4. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Look, I like cheese, just not in my porn.
     
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  5. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    ...I wonder if I can work in some kind of fondue sex scene. I mean hell, I've done worse.
     
  6. RejectTed

    RejectTed Really Experienced

    That's fine. Honestly, when Gina pointed it out, I was immediately reminded of a particularly bad bit of erotica that described a woman's feet as being cheesy. I just wrote that because spite is fun. I'll clean up the subtitle and about section, probably.

    Don't tell Captain America.
     
  7. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

  8. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    ...not gonna lie, that feels like a gauntlet thrown down.
     
  9. TheLeherengin

    TheLeherengin Really Really Experienced

    Good god please no...
     
  10. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru


    ;P

    I almost gave you a shoutout, but didn't want to be too indulgent

    But yes, I have to give the disgusting crown to Serca.


    ...would it be too big a blow to the ego to say you are only ranking at number three?
     
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  11. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    Nah. Truth be told I joked about starting a new story forever ago, but people kept upvoting LLNO and I wanted to finish that one before starting another story...but I might start a new moderated story and just update it occasionally. We'll see.
     
  12. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    I can appreciate the diligence.

    It really bugs me that I pretty much abandoned Clumsy ninja kanami at this point. Finishing stories feels much nicer.
     
  13. I think you should stop with the new chapter for every five likes thing if you want to finish the story. A lot of endings are very similar and the epilogues sometimes last more than ten chapters. I'm surprised you don't have burn out from this.
     
  14. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    It gets to be a habit.
     
  15. RejectTed

    RejectTed Really Experienced

    What are the rules for doing multiple threads in the same story? I have two threads in unrelated parts of a story (they even have different POVs). I'd like to have the ladies read both if that's possible. I don't mind waiting 3 months because it'll give me a chance to finish the second thread, but I doubt a can add 20 more chapters to thoe second thread after the ladies read the first as there's only about 10-15 chapters left in that particular story.
     
  16. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Ah an edge case!

    The twenty chapter follow up is intended for when it's a continuation for a single storybranch.

    In the case of individual branche on the same storys, each branch is treated seperately, which means a minimum of 10 chapters per branch is required.

    3 month waiting period still applies

    Oh, and to be clear, when the chapters where added is irrelevant. As long as Marcie and Gina haven't read them, they are counted as new chapters.
     
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  17. RejectTed

    RejectTed Really Experienced

    Great, then I'd like to throw some chapters I made for Bondage in Space to the lady dogs, starting with Eventful, you are ambushed.
     
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  18. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Excellent, added to the backlog
     
  19. RejectTed

    RejectTed Really Experienced

    It takes place in the future, but the words are from this century, so hopefully it'll be an easier read.
     
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  20. Dissonant Soundtrack

    Dissonant Soundtrack Really Really Experienced

    Alright, I've finally got a story with enough narrative to see what the ladies think of it. The Michael Clark branch of Harem Hotel is mine, but you'll likely need to read AliC's Rules Chapter to understand the setup. Do your worst.
     
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