Problem Child

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Loeman, Dec 4, 2016.

  1. Loeman

    Loeman Really Really Experienced

    Made a new story (my follow through is so unbelievably bad on my other stuff... but I can always go back and finish up when the mood for those threads hits me again, right?)

    If you have any thoughts or notice grammatical or whatever flaws I'd be happy to hear from you :)

    Also contributions (preferably not sloppy ones) are welcome, I think there's a lot of angles this story could be approached from.
     
  2. Artican

    Artican Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    What's the story about? I still need to finish up the Chris line in your party story.
     
  3. Loeman

    Loeman Really Really Experienced

    Well the introduction has two defined characters - Donald and Jeana. It's first person, written from Jeana's perspective. They were young parents and have had at least one child with a history of behavior problems that has persisted into their now-adulthood. The nature of those problems and the gender or personality of the child are deliberately nebulous, allowing for a wide variety of kinks to be explored and directions to be taken. There are currently two different children with two very different personalities and scenarios in progress, thanks to another contributor (elmer7780) who is rocking a totally different angle than I started with. The child I started with, Damien, currently has 1-2 significant branchings in progress, with room for many more (as is the nature of a chyoa story).

    Donald is an enabler that has a history of blaming anyone but his child, including Jeana, for their problems. Jeana has tried to be a stronger authority figure but has been foiled, mostly by Donald.

    The setup works towards encouraging various incest or near-incest (like being pimped or whatever) roles involving the traditionalist mother figure, from straight up nonconsent to momdom to mom slut to, well, lots of things. There is also a good chance of cucking of Donald or Jeana or both depending on where the thread is directed.

    Thank you very much for your work with Chris by the way, I love it.