Hi, around 3 weeks ago I have started writing the story for Futa Resort . The story is currently at 157 chapters and a game mode type interaction. I'm starting this thread to gain feedback on what people like and how to improve my writing and ideas from people on what they'd expect from such story. So I feel free to leave questions, feedback and ideas in this thread ^^
I think my first post here, should be a question to the people around the site. Should the story be located in the Fetish genre? I haven't seen much futa content there and I think it might better fit under Transsexual, not sure if I should request moderation to change it
I'll give it a closer read later, but judging from the title, yeah, imo it should be under Transsexual.
Ah, now I remember. I read part of this already, but stopped because futa-on-male-protagonist is not really my jam. I like the start. It's a little infodumpy, but I'm glad you didn't go all-out on "years ago, futas were created by blablabla" backstory. The protagonist could be a bit more surprised at what he encounters. He blinks a couple of times when he meets Samantha, but then basically just rolls with it. In fact, in general he feels a like a blank slate. It's a second-person story, soe the reader needs to be able to put themselves in his shoes, but still, try giving him a real personality. What's he into? What kind of person is he? Is he kind, rude, meek, scared, confident, funny, loyal, feisty, upbeat, honest? Prolong your sex scenes! The protagonist goes from 'just riding the elevator' to 'repeatedly and publicly fucked' in barely 270 words. Sentences like "Samantha fucks you some more" practically beg to be elaborated. How does she fuck him? How does it feel? What do he and they say? How does it change from minute to minute? How does he change? Once he enters his room, it's like nothing happened to him at all.
Thank you for the feedback, much appreciated <3 I am still getting into the groove of writing erotica, coming more from a visual novel and roleplay type writing. So initially I’m more inclined to skip over the poetic parts of descriptions in favour of just stating the facts. But I think it’s a good way to get out of my comfort zone and try to experiment a little especially for parts of the story that are not really branching out yet, since the intro and elevator scene are when player is at full masculinity. a lot of work goes into writing different descriptions when player is at different masculinity level, which is the main driver of the story and I really like the end effect, but I haven’t figured out how to be efficient with descriptions so they feel hot but don’t require me to write super long pages times five :/
