The Pendant

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Nemeses, Dec 18, 2016.

  1. Nemeses

    Nemeses Virgin

    Greetings one and all, and welcome to the official topic to my story The Pendant

    https://chyoa.com/story/The-Pendant.7260

    It's a story of corruption, and currently only follows the main path with no noteworthy branches written to it as of yet.

    Current list of fetishes added into my story: Corruption, Demons, Latex, Domination, Incest, Tramsformation, Futanari, and probably more.

    Lists of fetish that are highly unlikely to be written into the story by me: Furry, Loli, Shota, waterworks, pregnancy, scat.

    i welcome all feedback, so long as you are respectful and stay on topic. if you don't like something about my story, feel free to tell me what exactly it is you do not like about it.
    If you DO like my story, feel free to tell me what exactly it is you liked!

    you are free to come with suggestions as well, but fair warning, i may not run with your suggestions if i don't feel it fits with the story, or if the suggestions are to add fetishes from my list of highly unlikely fetishes to be written into the story.

    and before i end this very very long introduction/rant, i will add this: a lot of my chapters are very text heavy, and i am, eventually, going to try to make them a bit easier to read, the newer chapters will try to be a bit less text heavy as i work my way towards the conclusion of part 1. after part 1 is complete, i will start going over the chapters to try and make them easier to read.

    at this point it is safe to think "sheesh. finally he's done with that loooooooong boring rant" thanks for reading and thanks for future feedback!
     
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  2. raziel83

    raziel83 Really Really Experienced

    I am going to take a closer look at this story tonight and see if I can add something to it.
     
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  3. Nemeses

    Nemeses Virgin

    i feel i sh0uld mention that i am actually looking for other writers to expand on the universe i have begun creating in my story, currently i'd like it if someone would be willing to write stories for Clare becoming a demon, Clare becoming living liquid latex, or simply create your own characters with their own stories regarding the pendant and what it does
     
  4. Nemeses

    Nemeses Virgin

    hoy! for any of you who have read my story, liked it or didn't like, i am opening up for suggestions i can integrate into the story when i begin writing on it again. said it before, will say it again, Furry is highly unlikely, WS is highly unlikely, pregnancy... undecided.
     
  5. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    I say allow pregnancy, or at least impregnation, after all, half-demons...
     
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  6. Nemeses

    Nemeses Virgin

    fair point, will take it into consideration!