Marcie and Gina read CHYOA

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Gambio, Jan 24, 2021.

  1. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    *sigh* I'm behind on doing another review too. So much to do...
     
  2. vyksin

    vyksin Experienced CHYOA Backer

    If they can hold out until at least chapter 82, they might like the turn it takes, by the way.
     
  3. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Yeah, the aim is getting to chapter 100 or a good stopping point around there, so that shouldn't be an issue ;P
     
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  4. MichaelChaseLit

    MichaelChaseLit Experienced

    Hello! Apologies if I’m submitting this wrong, but I do believe I qualify for a review, and would love to toss my story in the ring! It’s called I am NOT a Hero!, and I would be enthralled to see myself thrown into the meat grinder of rudeness from Marcie and Gina. There’s (as of requesting) 44 chapters out. I have a feeling they’ll tear me apart for the intro, as I’ve re-re-re-re-rewritten it at this point and even *I* think it’s lackluster, but apart from that I’m really curious how they’ll destroy me. Sorry for having this be so long, I’m new to forum-ing.
     
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  5. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Haha, not a problem. We had considerably worse applicants.

    Put you in the backlog
     
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  6. Wrynn

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  7. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru


    No sharks AND a non centered image in the very first chapter? Somebody's feeling dangerous.

    Put you in the backlog ;P
     
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  8. Wrynn

    Wrynn Virgin

    I have to give Marcie something to complain about. No collages here.
     
  9. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

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  10. Gambio

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  14. vyksin

    vyksin Experienced CHYOA Backer

    I think Gina would dispute that statement. ;)

    Thank you again for the fun! I was actually surprised the whole parking garage and hardware store weren't a bit more memorable, but that whole life threatening thing right before probably did overshadow the mood, so I'll look into that.

    Fair critiques and enjoyment. Maybe I'll correct things before next time....
     
  15. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

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    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

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  17. Gambio

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  18. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

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  19. MichaelChaseLit

    MichaelChaseLit Experienced

    Thank you for taking the time to read my story! I had a lot of fun reading the review!

    Amazing choices for music, genuinely laughed at the DK pick.

    Also enjoyed the critiques! I’ll go a little more in-depth on the actual chapter replies section.

    Once more, thanks!
     
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  20. Wrynn

    Wrynn Virgin

    I'm guessing there were no sharks?
     
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