"Gia''

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by spacedra, Dec 14, 2014.

  1. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    Im new at this so my story is a work in progress and will be ruff around the edge. So any comet or subject are welcome and please add to it
     
  2. FallenSaint

    FallenSaint Really Really Experienced

    I'm trying to check it out but right now its not showing up in the search box. It may still be pending but I'll be sure to check it out and try to add to it. I normally have some ideas about where I want the story to go when I start writing a new story, but often I just let it go where the characters take it. Yeah I'm basically quoting Varric from Dragon Age but I find I agree with him lol. If you want to bounce ideas off of me, feel free. I've had long conversations with a few other writers and we've had a lot of success working together that way.

    Can you give me a few ideas of what you're thinking with this story until it comes up for me to read it? I can try to come up with some stuff to add in the meantime.
     
  3. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    Its been aproved so u can start adding anytime
     
  4. moonblack

    moonblack CHYOA Guru

    So far it's really short and with a lot of typos. Not much else to say yet.
     
  5. Zingiber

    Zingiber Really Really Experienced

  6. Zingiber

    Zingiber Really Really Experienced

    And the guidelines; since they only show up when you add a thread, they're more hidden in Chyoa than they used to be.

    I've done a light copy-edit of the original guidelines.

    Same rules as the D&D world but you can make up the gods and goddesses and get creative with the races. The story starts with your character receiving a letter from the Order of Monster Hunters telling you that you have been admitted into a college for the Order. No scat/pee or gore. Light blood play is allowed and you can die. Make your thread more than one sentence. If u see misspelling or have advice I welcome it because this is my first story, period. And have fun!​
     
  7. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    I've reriten it so you are at the academy aredy u start off chooseing your sex, race and that is as far as I've got also sorry for not responding to you the story is a tru choose your oun adventure theworld is still not fixed i havened come up with the layout i kindov want it to by a story for evey one pich in on i need the races you cane play as no monsters or demons thos are enemes
     
  8. ddf_21s

    ddf_21s Virgin

    Try to check grammar (MS Word or Chrome-build-in is fine) and punctuation. Take it, my friend: .......................,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,!!
     
  9. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    1st off im writing this on a ps4 and have no pc 2nt its hard for me to spell and write so i put alot atime in to the spelling of the stores but not on this thread thats why its shit
     
  10. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    If u can make it out grate if not ill tri harder
     
  11. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    Im just going to focus on the female side of the story for now. If u have any thing u want 2 see write a layout of it and ill try.I no i just started but im not shor how to or where to go from here if u want to help this story along please help.
     
  12. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    The rules r simple no scat, some blood play is aloud but no gruesome details vore is alright aslong as the chearter is swallowed whole and if its a end put some effort into it.
     
  13. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    Ihave put some place holders in allso i have put the features where u can put a name and hare and eye colors in
     
  14. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    Its been a long time since if up dated this but ive got some new details to put in first races,human,elves,underlings,fay kind ill expand on tham later.I will also be adding difint mythical races to i think ill write u different origin stores ill start one in a small village and one in the capital with in the academy. I may even give one as u as a monster also ill only be adding to it win feel like it.ill also be writing backgrounds for the races and monsters and with your help relegen and the structure of the world of Gia.
     
  15. fillmyholes18

    fillmyholes18 Virgin

    I would suggest not to write from your PS4. If you have a phone or laptop that would be ideal. All the grammar mistakes make it inconvenient for your reader and very hard to follow.

    Hopefully you can make improvements :)
     
  16. spacedra

    spacedra Virgin

    Hi its been awile i just added the beastman race witch is basicly people with animal aspects.Human ,elves,dwarfs and gnomes r a given most Demon and demihumen r all so good i just need to come up with some lore like different gods and goddess both good and evil maby a forgotten god like cathulu but with tentacle dicks.