Stud

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by airwreck, Oct 8, 2016.

  1. airwreck

    airwreck Really Experienced

    I created the story, Stud, as a bit of a "Marty Stu" (the male version of a Mary Sue character), where the protagonist tells of the heterosexual male fantasy (at least mine) of being married to an intelligent, gorgeous, and tall redhead who not only lets him have sex with her closest friends but also to impregnate them!

    Right now the story is set to private because I have plans to slowly insert the other female friends of the protagonist's wife, introduced at the baby shower party on the beginning of the story.

    Feedback, critiques, suggestions, and praise are appreciated.
     
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  2. Zingiber

    Zingiber Really Really Experienced

    :) The "Jacqueline Saunders" storyline that Ulap38 is adding to kinkygeek's "Secret Affairs" has the "stud husband" element, though here the wife also gets to pick studs to father those after her firstborn.
     
  3. gscmar64

    gscmar64 Really Experienced

    So i'm half way through the main thread and i'm really impressed with both your writing style and the passion presented by the characters. I'm really hoping Michael proves fertile enough to inseminate every female in your story. And maybe it's just me but i would like to see Michael hook up with one of the others without his wife knowledge,getting her pregnant!
     
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  4. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer


    The part with Michael hooking up with one of his wife's friend's without his wife's permission and knowledge doesn't really make sense and at least in my opinion that is cheating. If his wife gives him permission and doesn't mind him having sex with her friends and getting them pregnant, than he doesn't need to do such a thing. Him having sex with Emma in the motel, is with out his wife's knowledge, but she has given him permission to have sex with her and get her pregnant and maybe Emma talked with Sam before she sat up the plan with the motel or maybe Sam came up with the ideea, to ensure that Michael and Emma have sex as often as possible to ensure that she gets pregnant.
     
  5. airwreck

    airwreck Really Experienced

    That's why Mike was hesitant at first but both he and Emma justified it by saying they've had sex before when they were swinging and now they're doing it to get her pregnant. I left it grey for now to see if they plan to keep out a secret from Sam or if she's in on it.
     
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  6. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer

    I understand that. But that was what i was referring to, with Emma he has Sam's permission and i think that to some extent Sam expects the two of them to have as much sex as possible and as often as they can. Persoanlly i think it would be better if Sam would find out, because i don't think that she would be to pissed. If she didn't know maybe she will be a bit mad but she would understand and if she was in on it she would be happy that Mike told her. The problem would be Mike having sex with one of Sam's other friends without her knowledge and permission, which Sam might view as cheating and lying on Mike's part and might endanger what they have.
     
  7. gscmar64

    gscmar64 Really Experienced

    I'll agree that Sam may fell cheated if we all accept that they are happily married (We've only airwreck view on that!after all it wasn't much of a fight to get him to agree to inseminating Emma) But i may be interpreting this line form the introduction chapter wrong!

    We were what people call "swingers" -- we had safe and consensual sex with others but remained romantically faithful to each other, even when we finally got married.

    To me people don't just decide to become swingers when they meet someone,there usually a history of swinging in the past even if they don't acknowledge it.To me i take it both of them were swingers before they met,so for all we know Mike has possibly met one of Sam's friends in his swinger days or at a party they both attended as swingers and kept meeting in private until the marriage took place!.

    The absolute truth though is only the mind of airwreck knows for sure!
     
  8. Arminius

    Arminius Guest

    Honestly, gscmar64 i agree with what you said about swinging and about the relationship between Mike and Sam, but swinging generally involves the other partner (Sam) knowing about the fact the Mike is having sex with one or more of her friends. The issue - atleast in my opinion - isn't whether Mike should or should not have sex with another of Sam's friends, its about Sam knowing and being ok with Mike having sex with another of her friends and getting her pregnant. Yes, Mike and Sam love one another and they have been swinging in the past, but Airwreck also said in a thread that Sam is happy that during the period in which they where trying to get Sam pregnant, she had Mike just for herself. Swinging implies trust, knowledge and consent from both parties. Its how they make the difference between swinging and cheating. So i agree with what you said but also with what darkfriday1408 said.
     
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  9. gscmar64

    gscmar64 Really Experienced


    Arminius love the way you rectified both of our views into one perfectly presented argument Now that i'm fully up to date with the story ,I agree that airwreck did say the Sam and Mike is happy but in the thread where they go to Emma and Bill house i get the impression that Sam maybe a bit jealous that Emma was getting all of mike's cum (They Stay In The Dining Room and Sam Continues To Suck Him) and in the first thread i get the impression that Mike has ulterior motives that both Emma and Sam knows nothing about and that Emma has her own motives also (renting a motel room for a week with out telling Mike?)! Maybe I'm just analyzing what i'm reading to much(scarcastically, Thanks grade 10 English Lit!) or putting to much thought into the characters .Either way I suggest we politely ask ariwreck to write more of this great story!
     
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  10. airwreck

    airwreck Really Experienced

    Hi guys/gals, thanks for analysis and feedback. I'll take into consideration what you wrote in the upcoming chapters -- maybe Mike feels guilty not informing Sam of him meeting up with Emma at a motel during lunch, maybe Sam planned it with Emma, or Sam gets upset when she finds out.

    Anyway, like I wrote earlier Mike and Emma justified, to themselves at least, that they're only doing it to conceive and aren't cheating. We'll see how that plays out! ;)
     
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  11. airwreck

    airwreck Really Experienced

    I how you guys are enjoying the expansion of women Mike now has to try to get pregnant.
     
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  12. DarkFriday1408

    DarkFriday1408 Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Personally, i like it and i am curious to see how it will further develop and how will Mike manage to juggle having sex with so many women and how will the situation with him, Sam and the other women develop once they are pregnant and after Sam gives birth. And i also want to see what will happen once all of the women are pregnant, if he will manage to get all of them pregnant, and what he will do after that, considering that he will pretty much have to go from regular sex sessions, to very little or no sex.

    I am also curious to see how the thread where Mike and Sam go with Bill and Emma to the swingers resort in Jamaica and meet Julia and Katsumi will develop. I am curious to see if Emma really didn't end up pregnant or if she took birth control pills to keep having sex with Mike. Of course, this would also imply that she lied to Bill or that they can't actually not have children.

    I hope that you will manage to develop the story on a more regular basis.

    Good luck and happy writing.
     
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  13. gscmar64

    gscmar64 Really Experienced

    Of course were liking it, it's well written, good plot with many ways to achieve the end with many different ending occurring. All get pregnant, some getting pregnant or none but his wife getting pregnant. Hell you could even throw a monkey wrench into the works have Sam getting pregnant by someone else and just saying it was by Mike!
     
  14. dingsdongs

    dingsdongs Really Really Experienced

    I believe that i skimmed over a few chapters some time ago when the story was far less developed. I'll try to give the story a proper chance some time and actually read it ;-)

    Anyways: At that time i thought it was a perfect setup for cuckold and or harem themes. Because the main character is trying to get other (married or otherwise taken) women pregnant, possibly has to have regular sex with them to achieve that goal, it didn't seem too far fetched of for these women to decide, that he might be a more manly / sexy / satisfying / sexually powerful partner (he gets them pregnant, where the regular partners fail to do that!) than their regular husbands. And then to degrade them to their jobs and taking care of the children, while the women continue to have fun and sex with the main character.
     
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  15. airwreck

    airwreck Really Experienced

    Mike and Sam are faithful to each other, as far as swingers go -- Sam allows him to have sex with her friends only for the purpose of getting them pregnant and with no emotional attachment involved. He won't cheat on her -- what guy married to a beautiful redhead who allows to fuck her friends would? ;)

    So that's basically the parameters and limits of the story I've set up.
     
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  16. dingsdongs

    dingsdongs Really Really Experienced

    Of course i'm not trying to tell you how to write your story and do not expect you to develop the characters in directions that you don't want them to go.

    I just try do give a little feedback of what i would find interesting in such a story. :)

    And i wouldn't call it cheating if it happens with the wifes consents or if she even encourages it. She could realize that she gets turned on by her man impregnating her friends, and thus try to actively encourage them. Pethaps she likes to watch and / or take part in the sexual acts.

    Just thinking out loud here.
    And i still haven't actually read the story yet, but it's on my to do list. I realize it would make more sense if i actually know the story and characters were talking about here, so i'll refrain from posting anymore suggestions until i have read the story ;-)
     
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  17. airwreck

    airwreck Really Experienced

    In the recent post, Sam does watch Mike try to impregnate a friend.
     
  18. Hecaton

    Hecaton Virgin

    It'd be fun if Sam embraced herself as a cuckquean full-on; admitting that she wants to see Mike have sex with/knock up other women, but has no interest in extracurricular activities herself.
     
  19. airwreck

    airwreck Really Experienced

    In one of the recent threads she watched Mike fuck a lesbian friend of hers. At the time she's four months pregnant so she's less likely to have sex herself, other than love making with her husband.
     
  20. Hecaton

    Hecaton Virgin

    Why not? Plenty of people keep fucking through their pregnancy.