Story Discussion and Planning for: The Lady Knight Errant in the Cruel World

Discussion in 'Authors' Hangout' started by MissHolvard, Jan 9, 2015.

  1. MissHolvard

    MissHolvard Experienced

    Like my previous one, it features a female protagonist and is focused on "Bad Endings". This one takes place in a magic-less, with the world ranging from 19th century to around 13th century technology. Cecilia is a knight and guard in an Imperial vassal state. When her husband is contractually enslaved over his debts and whisked away to the Imperial Capital, Cecilia is faced with raising 100,000G. Prostitution, Banditry, trading herself into slavary, war, subterfuge, rebellion... there are many ways to achieve her goal, each with their own risks. There are around 6 different regions, each with their own culture and dangers.
    https://chyoa.com/story/a-lady-knight-errant-in-the-cruel-world/cover
     
    Last edited: Jan 12, 2015
  2. MissHolvard

    MissHolvard Experienced

    The story has been posted.
     
    Last edited: Jan 12, 2015
  3. MissHolvard

    MissHolvard Experienced

    The story has been posted, with the events leading up to Bad Ending #1: The Duke's Plaything
     
  4. moonblack

    moonblack CHYOA Guru

    Nice start! There's an incomplete sentence is the opening thread:
    No other issues seen so far.
     
  5. MissHolvard

    MissHolvard Experienced

    Feedback has been good so far. I will elaborate on the sex more.

    More choices are coming, as well. Unlike, my other story, I want more of the threads converge to endings between 3 and 7 pages deep.

    Choice 1: Where does Cecilia look for a solution
    Choice 2: Who or what does she approach there for a solution.
    Choice 3~7: That specific story for the Where-What combo.
     
  6. MissHolvard

    MissHolvard Experienced

    I made the story public, and added another starter section for a new city.

    Don't add to the first page of the story. I will be adding the intros for each city from there.
     
  7. MissHolvard

    MissHolvard Experienced

    I added the intro to Erantu, the center of organized crime that acts as the Empire's border city to the North.

    A recurring plot point will be how pure, noble, and intelligent the Olympian people are thought of outside their relatively safe and sheltered city. That makes them lucrative targets for breeding and servitude. Not just sexual servitude, but as general business associates.
     
  8. MissHolvard

    MissHolvard Experienced

    I updated the story recently. Many new plot threads, and several new bad endings.
     
  9. reader230

    reader230 Virgin

    I really like this story, look forward to seeing this develop and grow. Might add a few threads myself. Great work!