first story review and suggestions for chapters

Discussion in 'Authors' Hangout' started by brain66, Nov 23, 2017.

  1. brain66

    brain66 Virgin

    i have recently begun writing a story called futa Katie's misadventures (https://chyoa.com/story/futa-katie's-misadventures.14003)

    this is the first story i have written if you are interested in the story please read and give suggestions for storyline(s) and also on how i can improve it if necessary
     
  2. Loeman

    Loeman Really Really Experienced

    I think the potential for a shaming storyline could be potentially interesting.

    Even if her friends are accepting of her extra parts, that doesn't mean everyone would have to be (or realistically would be). How nerve-wracking and embarrassing it might be for her to be potentially exposed to the wrong crowd!

    I dunno, I'm not big into futas so I'm not really your intended audience, but the potential for suspense, humiliation, betrayal, and even danger seems an obvious avenue if you haven't gone there yet.
     
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