Hi! I am the creator and author of the CHYOA story The Foreigner. https://chyoa.com/story/The-Foreigner.14555 This is only my first contribution to the site, It is my first ever story anywhere. The purpose of this thread is for discussion of that story, how to improve it, what you like and/or dislike about it.
Character descriptions are lacking a bit. I don't think I have ever read about what hair colour they have. The french character is just not described- in terms of appearance, at all. You mentioned that we should use our imaginatiom but give the reader something to work with. You don't have to describe them at once, gradually do so. For example only write about breast size during a sex scene, only write about hair like; "She idly touched her auburn hair, bored and lazy. She heard a noise by the window, and her hazel eyes darted towards it." You have done that once though alot of major characters just lack a description.
Thanks for the feedback! I have noticed this and I thought I should just roll with it. I have a few ideas for other stories where I will make sure to put your tips to good use. Thanks again!
