Hi everyone, I'm the author of Karen's secret (link here). I opened this thread to get some feedback and criticism for my story. Summary: You take the role of a man in his late twenties/early thirties, who is head-over-heels in love with Karen. After a blissful eight months together, you are ready to propose to her. One day, however, you stumble upon a secret she had kept hidden from you. Your choices will determine how the secret affects you, your perception of Karen and the state of your relationship from now on. Tags: Swinging, Threesomes, Foursomes, Bisexuality (both genders), Feet, Anal, Light domination, Open relationships, Cuckolding, Cuckqueaning As I mentioned in the introduction, the complete story is about 70,000 words long and I'm uploading it in parts as I try to get used to chyoa's formatting style. Hopefully I should have the entire story up within a week or so. I'll update this thread along with the introduction as it happens. Currently the first three and a half chapters are up with Ending 1 available. Thanks even advance for any help! Even for those of you who don't have anything to say but took the time to read my story.
Update 17/12/22: Uploaded till the end of Part VIII, about 75% total. No new endings. On an additional note, the editor does not always italicize correctly (instead of looking like this it looks like _this _ ). If you catch any words with unexpected underscores, please leave a comment in the relevant chapter letting me know. This is bugging me to no end.
Update 17/12/24: All chapters and endings uploaded. Thanks for all the likes! Wish you all happy holidays. A downloadable version of the story is available here (MEGA Link).
This story could be a good example to demonstrate Chyoa - both features and content, with hot writing and good editing.
I'm glad you feel that way. Most people who've messaged me have been surprisingly supportive, and it has really helped me in putting more effort in the one I'm writing now. I don't think my editing is very good though. Every time I reread the story, I keep wincing at how many words I've repeated in quick succession. And I have this terrible habit of switching tenses halfway through a passage.
