A thread for discussion of Sappho's Amulet -- criticism, suggestions, requests, etc. (edit: link to the story: https://chyoa.com/story/Sappho's-Amulet.311 )
This one is far more rape-y than the other one, after reading part of the Emily storyline, I'm feeling conflicted, but all in all, I just don't like it. In particular, this chapter bothers me: https://chyoa.com/chapter/Yes!.3574 The protagonist could have convinced Em to make the decision to accept without using the Amulet, and it's out of character for her to not do so. It might have gone something like this:
By "this one" do you mean this particular thread, or the whole story? I agree about letting Emily make the decision. I inherited this story from another writer, and didn't want to eliminate any of the creator's work, though. Creating a branch point that follows along the lines you suggest isn't a bad notion, though.
I concur... that's why I abandoned it. The story just wasn't working out the way I'd originally wanted it to. (I used to be "gystex" but had to create a new account due to password problems)
