Sexual Privilege

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by SanctifiedVillified, Sep 2, 2017.

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  1. SanctifiedVillified

    SanctifiedVillified Virgin

    Hey all. Just started writing on here about a week ago and did six chapters in "The Developer's Room" then decided to start my own story. It's only two chapters deep, but I tend to write long ass chapters. I'd appreciate any feedback you can give me! Thanks!

    Link - https://chyoa.com/story/Sexual-Privilege.13397
     
    Last edited: Sep 2, 2017
    SanctifiedVillified, Sep 2, 2017
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  2. GenericEditor168

    GenericEditor168 Really Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Would you mind providing a link to the story here, to make things easier for people?
     
    GenericEditor168, Sep 2, 2017
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  3. SanctifiedVillified

    SanctifiedVillified Virgin

    Woops! My bad.
     
    SanctifiedVillified, Sep 2, 2017
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  4. personunused

    personunused Virgin

    Good work on creating some legitimate variation in circumstance and character.
     
    personunused, Apr 3, 2018
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