I recently started my first story and I would appreciate any help. I am not the best writer, so any tips would be great. Feel free to post threads if you want. http://chyoa.com/story/watching-mom-s-dark-adventure/cover
Not bad! Your grammar and punctuation could use some work to improve the flow, but there are few glaring errors. As for content, I'm loving the 'personal slave' branch... Please continue pushing the boundaries there!
