Hey everybody, For some reason my new story is displayed (at least for me) as if it only has one chapter. However, it's quite larger, with Part 1 being almost 10k words. I was kinda hoping to get some feedback for part two, so anything would be really helpful. Here's the story's logline: As a way of celebrating school finally finished, you decide to take a trip to an old lakehouse. You never imagined this would involve threesomes, cheating and brand new sexual experiences. The link: https://chyoa.com/story/Big-Pleasure-in-Little-Heaven.20740 Contributions welcome! I also encourage you to read my first finished story, "Fucking Lena". I tried to use a similar concept but improve it as much as possible (mainly by having characters that were a bit more complex). I hope it shows. Thanks to everyone who replied to my last forum post! Very helpful feedback. And thanks for reading my new story. V
By cheating do you mean skipping parts? I do tend to let the reader "skip" parts of the story but this is always clearly displayed and tends to have consequences later on. I like to let the reader choose how involved they want to get with the story. Hope you still enjoyed the read!
As far as I know Nemo he means cheating as in "cheating spouses". The double entendre here is quite funny though.
