Dates with secrets

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by reaper13, Sep 9, 2019.

  1. reaper13

    reaper13 Experienced

    Hey, guys and girls,

    I recently started a new story and already got a good arc for one girl, but i'm having difficulty coming up with good ideas for other girls. I mean, i do get ideas, just not ones that i think are great enough or have difficulty working them out. So i was wondering if many some of you can help me out.

    The basic idea for each of the girls is this. Early on they reveal a secret about themselves, but this secret is a red herring. The true secret gets revealed a bit later. Preferably without directly mentioning it to the reader.

    The current girl i've written about goes like this. Lora's mentioned secret is she's a young mother, and her unmentioned secret is she's a yandere. Hency why her love % in game mode goes all the way up to 200.

    Other girls i've come up with but need help working out their arcs are:
    - a goth girl whose mentioned secret is she's into occultism and her unmentioned secret is her trying to cast a spell to either switch bodies with the main character or turn him into a girl for 48 hours and if her gets himself pregnant he stays a girl forever.
    - a cute futanari whose sperm causes the main character to transform into a girl. Needs a few injections for full transformation.

    So, can any of you help out on working out these 2 girls? Help me find where to find great pictures to compliment their stories or come up with ideas for new girls?
     
  2. brevdravis

    brevdravis Really Really Experienced

    Well, right off the bat I say that all of the characters need some motivations. WHY does this goth gal want to be the main character or gender swap him? Why does the Futa want to transform the MC...
    Start with what the characters want, and you'll be surprised how much of their details will flow from that. If you want to just keep it mysterious, and let the reader decide why... you can do that of course, but it will show when you finally come up with motivation.
     
  3. reaper13

    reaper13 Experienced

    I decided for the goth girl to be curious about how sex is like for the other side, hence why she wants to do it.
    For the futa, there is not really a why, her sperm just works that way. But she wants to have a girlfriend, and no girl she dated wants to look past her dick, so for her to sissify the main character is acceptable for her.

    The biggest issue i am having though is i can't think of interesting story concepts other than forced impregnation, body swap and transformation. does anyone have any suggestions?
     
  4. Ben Rosewood

    Ben Rosewood Really Experienced

    What if the female character was actually the MC who had been transformed in a previous storyline and was trying to reverse/prevent their fate?
     
  5. reaper13

    reaper13 Experienced

    Would be either the culmination of the goth girl's path or a 2nd ending for her. Great idea.