Describing body parts.

Discussion in 'Authors' Hangout' started by RicoLouis, Jan 10, 2021.

  1. RicoLouis

    RicoLouis Really Really Experienced

    I have a tendency to use expressions and metaphores when trying to describe characters wanting them each to have there own feel about them and was wondering if anyone else has ever done the same.

    1. She had small but long nipples. The kind I swore could poke your eye out if you weren't careful.

    2. She had a nice tight heart shaped ass. You could stick a piece of coal up her ass and she shit out a diamond.

    3. As I watched her walked I thought to myself she could crack a walnut between those ass cheeks of hers.

    4. You could bounce a quarter off of her ass cheeks.
     
    Last edited: Jan 10, 2021
  2. MidbossMan

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    I also fall on metaphor a lot. For one thing, you can be pretty funny with it, and for another, you can keep your writing from feeling too repetitive. Often times it can also keep you from getting into technical measurements, which are best avoided, in my opinion.

    You're going to have to explain that diamond one to me, though!
     
  3. gene.sis

    gene.sis CHYOA Guru

    Might work better like
    You could stick a piece of coal up her ass and she would shit out a diamond.
     
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  4. RicoLouis

    RicoLouis Really Really Experienced

    Wrote the wrong thing. I get ahead of myself sometimes.
     
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