Futa Island

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Kazza, Feb 16, 2020.

  1. Kazza

    Kazza Experienced

    Hello writers and everyone in the CHYOA community!

    Over the last few months, I've been slowly chipping away at my largest story to date, Futa Island, which as of writing this is up to 233 chapters and has one completed ending (second coming soon).

    The layout of this story is modeled after games where there are many locations to explore, each with their own events and unique NPC's. There is an energy system, day counter and special currency which can be earned and spent on various items and activities.

    While the game is in an early state (there is still much I plan to add), it is starting to take shape quite nicely.

    This is a private story so I am writing it all myself, but I would like to know if anyone out there has any feedback or ideas while I still have time to shape the narrative.

    Link to story ~ https://chyoa.com/story/Futa-Island.24297

    Please and thank you,
    Kazza <3
     
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  2. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    You've put a lot of work into it! I haven't gone through all the content yet, but it's pretty good so far. I like the occasional use of images to spice things up. There are a lot of different directions you could go - I might suggest spacing out the sissygasm route a little, maybe by limiting them to one per day?
     
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  3. Kazza

    Kazza Experienced

    Thanks Zeebop! I really like reading illustrated stories but they can be hard to work in sometimes. Spacing out the hypno sissy stuff was my original plan, but I decided to scale it back for time as it was only ever intended to be a fun little side thread. I intend to explore a lot more of the submissive kinks over a longer period of time with another character that has yet to be introduced.
     
  4. Aerial

    Aerial Virgin

    Hey, I see you arent adding to this story anymore. But I absolutely love it!!! I can imagine you can need some ideas, as this can be tiresome and draining. If you need help with ideas, writing or anything at all I'm happy to help, if you'd let me. :)