Hello everyone, it's my first post in this forum. The German forum is pretty quiet. I have started translating my stories into English. For this, I use several programs. Therefore, I would be deeply grateful for feedback and criticism so that I can expand my skills, and you all can enjoy reading more. Thanks in advance and happy new year, everyone! Here is the Link to my Story : https://chyoa.com/story/A-package-into-obedience.41201
It's a fairly straightforward blackmail story at this point; nothing particularly dark or weird so far. The machine translation is a bit awkward; a lot of the issues are not about technical English rules but the awkwardness of phrasing, word choice, etc. I like that it goes a bit slow and doesn't start off with hardcore sex, but works up to it. I would personally like it if there was more of a risk - of people finding out - or maybe some guilt about what she's doing.
Thanks for your feedback. Well, that's what I was afraid of. My vocabulary isn't good enough to do it myself, so I use the machine, and change as much as I can. Hope I improve my English skills over time. Story: That was the plan, a simple blackmail, built up really slowly and getting faster and harder over time.
