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I don't get the "A vs B" discussion here. Why not have both? More suggestions on the front page is always good. People come here, they look for guidance. At the moment, they have "recent updated" stories, new stories and 20 best voted chapters/stories, with some overlaps (which have been even...

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Well, you are certainly right there, and adjectives like "big" or "beautiful" are always highly subjective and to be used with caution, especially in book writing and journalism. So yes, your examples are better, generally speaking. There is a caveat, and that's the very special style and...

I get what you mean and agree in principle, but this still doesn't work for me. "From 32B to 34D" simply doesn't really creates any pictures in my mind. A very simple sentence like "grew significantly bigger in his mind" would be more effective than the number game. For me at least.

In general, avoid description with letter, numbers and figures that you can't know by just looking at somebody. Avoid describing a person as 1,65 Meters height (or inches or whatever people use where you are from). I look at a person, I don't know how tall he or she is. I don't know their...

Oh, thank you. :)

@Zeebop I tip my hat. This is all amazing advice and the work, effort and investment you put in here is beyond words for me. You deserve more than just a "like".

It could be very annoying in a story that is written by only one author though.

True, but classes give people a sense of order. Makes it easier to identify and orientate for some readers, especially in a fantasy setting. Classes, in a way, come with their own background (everybody knows or believe he knows how the youth of a fighter or a thief looked like), while skills...

This is a wonderful idea. I need to bookmark this and return when I have more time. Great thread and exceptional kind and professional advice so far.

For what it's worth, I'll add my 50 cent: I like a good non-con story, but everything "real life" is a turn-off for me, and I am not only talking morally, but also from my very private taste: It really is a turn-off. The same goes, by the way, for "celebrity" stories. Never saw the fun in that...

Some great posts here.

Noboby here watched the Westworld series, where robots rise against their fate of being sex dolls?

Wow, thank you! This is... very nice to hear. :) Can you leave a comment right at the chapter where you have the problem? Would probably help me to track down the mistake in the code more easily. Also, as mentioned in the introduction, this story is, in theory, open for collaboration, as it...

Don't know if it helps, but the Xiang-thread of my Happy Maid story deals with a woman who slowly develops fantasies and dreams about being overpowered. The development is subtle, and the scenes will only get more strict at a later stage (maybe not even reaching your "extreme" point at all at...

Start small and expand. Game mode is excellent to start with the path of 3-4 girls, establish the plot and the structure, maybe have some other girls appear and then flesh them out when you have a functioning story. If you start with too many choices at once, you risk getting bogged down. I'd...

I like the thought of doing this in game mode, and initial decisions influence if you end up having sex with your best friend in the end. Would need some thinking abour interesting, enticing decisions, which are not too obvious and each bringing their own little rewards.

Start an excel sheet. Note down the variables. Look them up from time to time. Problem solved. ;)

My rule of thumb is: Give the reader at least two options. That feels like a choice. Don't give him 5 choices, if you don't have to. So start with the party, start with one girl (or two), and then give him a few limited choices on how to behave - and don't branch off into tiny little things...

You are right, but I disagree slightly: There are a few ways to create meaningful choices. One is to introduce a set of character stats (not too many) that actually play a role in the story and can and will be changed often while playing. If you include a set of encounters, each of those giving...