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  1. mkokp

    Front Row

    I came back after a 3 year break and wrote this story in a couple days https://chyoa.com/chapter/Introduction.1879829 Then after getting some advice and feedback, I tried adjusting the character personalities of my characters. How does the story read? What suggestions can you offer?
  2. mkokp

    My body gets discovered

    I agree, I love female POV. I need to work adding more of her thoughts to make it work properly. I do try to make my chapters more than just Yes/No or Next. The idea that people might want to skip to certain parts is interesting, I will try to make the chapter titles indicate the event, but...
  3. mkokp

    My body gets discovered

    This is a great point about dialogue. I will think how best to add more. I guess the story so far has just been Yasmin on her own and there wasn't anyone to talk to. That's probably why I wanted to add the family angle or a friend for her to interact with. Inner monologue and her thoughts is a...
  4. mkokp

    My body gets discovered

    Story Link I wanted some feedback on how the story is going. I kinda feel like overhauling the current chapters, adding more detail about her home life and tweaking the plot elements. Possibly inserting two chapters before the current ones and shifting them all down a bit? I'm not sure how the...
  5. mkokp

    A Good View

    https://chyoa.com/story/A-Good-View.37586 So I am several chapters deep on two different paths. I just wanted some feedback on the style so far before I get too much writing done. Firstly: POV Is the 2nd person POV working here? I know it fits with the "Choose your own adventure" style but I'm...
  6. mkokp

    Gender of POV Characters?

    I was thinking about this exact question. I always write female POV, but for my first CHYOA story I'm writing the same story from both POVs. One thread as the Male character and the other thread as the Female character. (I am unsure how this would work if I introduce more than two, but then a...
  7. mkokp

    My Own Chapter Approvals

    Hi I have a story and I am not sure if it is pending, or approved. Some chapters show as published and have views. Other chapters show as "In Review" I had the option to approve the chapters yesterday, but I can't do it with the new ones? https://chyoa.com/story/A-Good-View.37586 Screenshot...
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