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    Rejected Opening Lines

    "I can arrange that! He could use a good KISS!" Leia thought about it as she watched the asshole walk away.
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    Bulwer-Lytton Quality Erotica Openers.

    There was something alluring about the way she magically wiped the encrusted grime from a dish and seductively squeezed the brownish liquid into the bright and shining metal of the sink.
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    What is your "deleted scene" in your story?

    Well, in ASH, there was the deleted scene where I deliberately set it up for incest in the mother/son direction. Then I realized I really DIDN'T want to write a scene putting the main character under his parents authority, to make it work properly. Still could work the original scene it, but...
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    Thoughts on the Cuckold fetish?

    There's also the possibility that the "Victim" walks into it with eyes wide open and is only pretending not to see it. I can EASILY think of multiple gender swapped variants on this. Actually really makes sense from a psychological point of view based off unspoken power dynamics. The sub who...
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    A Special Hell (Request and Feedback Thread)(SPOILERS)

    Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, a couple of the supernaturals were just ridiculously silly, but I plead insanity. At least I hope left field was entertaining. Glad you enjoyed the other endings and I had at least one that was to your taste. :) IMHO, the story's pretty much done, and I'm...
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    What's your view on images in stories?

    I say give options. Entire point of Chyoa after all. I used to have unskippable images in my story, but then I added the option to not have the images. Some like em, some HATE em. Therefore, I do both. Yes, this option is a LOT more Dreaded W... Work.
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    Is it weird to put non-consent in a story that isn’t labeled non-con?

    When I first wrote non-con scenes, I was so worried about it that I labeled every single chapter that i wrote with bit bright flashing warnings. Then I realized that it just got more views, and I stopped doing that because I wanted people to enjoy the story, not jump to the scenes I'm warning...
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    Bulwer-Lytton Quality Erotica Openers.

    For those who don't know, The Bulwer-Lytton Contest is put on every year, at the English Department of San Jose State. They used to publish em, but don't any more. So... since they usually shy away from awarding anything to the ones I liked, How bout some BAD openers for Erotica... Just the...
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    May the Morons in your day Part Like a Sea of Troubles. Or something to that effect. Sounded...

    May the Morons in your day Part Like a Sea of Troubles. Or something to that effect. Sounded better in my head, apologies.
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    Does a series ever get away from you...in a good way?

    See, I was going to do a nice simple linear story. Which I did. Then I decided when I posted it HERE to fix the typos. Then there was this thing about the ending that always bothered me, and I wished I'd fleshed out a little more of a few things... which the Chyoa format totally lets me do...
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    A Special Hell (Request and Feedback Thread)(SPOILERS)

    Since I don't feel good about ever deleting work, I'm reworking a few older chapters to be more in line with Charlotte's later characterization. Makes the beats a LITTLE different, but I hope folks enjoy it.
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    Bad Halloween Story Ideas

    Escape from Stardom: The year, 1977. You've had it up to here with the fans, the place. It was fun for a joke, but now... it feels like prison. The drugs they keep giving you aren't keeping you sane, they're just keeping you chained. The food just holds you prisoner in your own body. The...
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    The real world needs to hit unpause again, I think the player went to lunch.

    The real world needs to hit unpause again, I think the player went to lunch.
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    When you know you fucked a minor plot point up and it bugs you.

    Ah the art of handwaving! The easy, all purpose continuity quicker fixer upper! When in doubt follow the simple basic rules. 1. Is there "Magic" in this story? Whenever you notice something like that... 2. Is there any technology that you can't understand in this story? See rule one...
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    Bad Halloween Story Ideas

    Little Shop of Whores In a New York Florist Shop, a small tentacle plant named Audrey III offers the new owner anything his heart desires... in exchange for virgin blood. No, no, the owner doesn't have to KILL them... just... make certain that the girl is a virgin when properly offered to a...
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    What would you like to see in a Time Travel plot?

    I actually read that short story once, but I can't remember the author. Story was set in the nineties, and had a lot of references to "The Prisoner" for some reason. Don't know why. Course, the story ends with the guy failing, going back to his time, and finding out that she was the worst...
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    Bad Halloween Story Ideas

    Cocktapus: In the depths of SaFeCRawL (Secret Fried Chicken Research Laboratories), something has gone horribly wrong! An attempt to create drumsticks for everyone, has resulted in a creature that seeks the most succulent of female flesh! Guide an Elite corporate clean up crew as they try to...
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    Bad Halloween Story Ideas

    Cocktapus 3: Mating Season Following on the from the hit blockbusters Cocktapus and Cocktapus 2: The Doomed Island, we're proud to bring you Cocktapus 3: Mating Season! Following her narrow escape from the depraved hands of the Cocktapus hive, Carole desperately tries to convince the locals...
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    What would you like to see in a Time Travel plot?

    Sorry I had to abandon the framing device. Honestly, I got bogged down as soon as I took a look at the gender button for the story creation and realized that no matter what I picked somebody was probably gonna get pissed off if I tried to make it universal. Heinlein went for the incest angle...
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    Need Ideas For Quests

    Well, stealing from the old westerns comes to mind, specifically "The Cheyenne Social Club." Classic issues include customers who don't feel they should pay/think they need to follow the rules. Medical issues. Rivalry involving favoritism. Do you hire a guard? If so, do you go with the...
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