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  1. Twiska

    Aging up canonically underaged characters

    The best way I saw it done is with a Naruto fan faction. I forget which one, here the first thing the author did was a lore change. Making all characters graduate the ninja academy at 18 instead of 12. It's funny if you're a Naruto fan, as Naruto is basically about child soldiers. When it comes...
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    Split one chapter into two. Should and could it be done?

    Sorry about not linking it, here it is: https://chyoa.com/chapter/Introduction.971882 By introduction I mean the first chapter as that is what chyoa auto named the first chapter in a story. The first chapter is about 2,500 words. Chapter 2 is around 1,300 words.
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    Gender of POV Characters?

    I have only written one erotic story. And the POV is female. I chose this as I saw a lack of strong, proactive, slutty female POVs on chyoa. As those are the stories, I enjoy reading the most. So I thought I should just do it myself. To why I enjoy reading those POVs is mainly because I enjoy it...
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    Split one chapter into two. Should and could it be done?

    Looking at my story map, I can see a massive drop from chapters 1 to 2 in terms of views. And chapter 1 is very long. I'm about nine chapters into a linear story. Should I split chapter 1 into two parts? And if I did, how would I put a new chapter in between chapters 1 and 2?
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    Am I the worst type of reader out there?

    This is really the only thing I think is just a bad thing to do. If you enjoy something or don't, it's up to you. Unless you're writing a review, you don't really have to explain why you do or don't like something. If if you do like it, I'd say at least give it a like. Not liking it because it...
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    Feed back on my story, The Chronicles of Lilinevera.

    I'm working on adding servants. Humans, demons and possibly other succubi. Maybe a mentor-type character. And I didn't exactly say who her master is but I did hint at it with a rolling stones reference. I stated that if she falls in battle her soul would be split up into lesser demons. Not sure...
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    Feed back on my story, The Chronicles of Lilinevera.

    What part of that line exactly. I'll do fix it. I most likely have a tonne of types, hard to spot without a proofreader/editor. But I still can't see that particular one.
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    Feed back on my story, The Chronicles of Lilinevera.

    I plan to set up a hub chapter later to allow the reader to go on story threads that lead back to a natural hub. I don't know if game mode is necessary to link chapters but I know conditions are. If I don't need game mode I'll turn it off. But I honestly don't know how to do that.
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    Feed back on my story, The Chronicles of Lilinevera.

    Thanks for the help. I definitely agree I repeat things like "I" too much as well as not building up the sex scenes or being descriptive enough. I tried to work on that in my latest chapter. I'm trying to shorten the chapters, I plan to have choices come in after the prologue. I'm still in the...
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    Feed back on my story, The Chronicles of Lilinevera.

    I have just joined this site and have published my first story. I was hoping to get feedback on it, positive or negative. Here is the link if you would like to read it: https://chyoa.com/story/The-Chronicles-of-Lilinevera.37457
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