Hello everyone. This is the feedback thread for my fantasy story, A Demon's Revenge. To begin, you can read it here: https://chyoa.com/story/A-Demon's-Revenge.32255 A little bit about the story; It is a fantasy story set in a world with demons, monsters and magic. The principle characters are Aron Steelside and Ana-Maria who meet and marry in the prologue when she helps him defeat the titular demon. Defeated, but not dead, the demon comes back to exact his revenge on Aron by stealing Ana. After the prologue, the story divides into Aron's story and Ana's side of the tale. Of course, you, as the reader can go back and re-read both branches, however the intention is to simulate a sense of not knowing of where the other character is, what they're doing or what choice is the right one. That's it for now. Let me know what you think of the premise, and the idea of splitting the paths. Any constructive criticism and suggestions to improve are also welcome. And thanks for reading.
New chapter on Aron's path where he trusts his gut and gets back to town faster https://chyoa.com/chapter/Head-back-to-Coh.839116
