Adventurer's Perils

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  1. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    https://chyoa.com/story/Adventurer's-Perils.21854
    The project of party friends surviving adventures in fantasy settings was beginning as cooperation of unisol_gr44 and my, Regin34. Soon join to us other writers like 11kestrels, hambo and Habilon. This is place where we can share our ideas and suggestion how the story should continue. And of course every others writers who want to join us, are welcome here.
     
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  2. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    In plans on future in secend story line it conection of Khala, Mira, Lex and Ariane branches in one. Right now Mira/Lex are finished so now Khala need her bdsm session with halforc. Any wishes?
     
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  3. habilon

    habilon Virgin CHYOA Backer

    so i should probably explain my plan (or basic idea) here?

    Well in the path I am working on I am currently planning on having the group + Samora go and get revenge on the two bandits, likely having Mira or Ariane go in naked (so as to not give away that she has help) as the two men start to capture and bind her the other three girls sneak around them, the three springing in from different directions to take the men out, leaving paths available for this to fail but I will focus on them winning.

    After the revenge the three heroines would go to continue their quest, Samora leaving for now stating she needs to turn in her bounty (samora could appear later on but this was a small cameo for now ^^) the heroines head off on their adventure, thinking they:

    a) find out the disappearing people is due to a group of goblins that is growing rather large
    or
    b) Find a slave trading hub run by a bandit chief
    or
    c) Find some sort of beast that was eating the disappearing people

    from there depending on the threat will depend on what happens with the heroines and how well things go for them
     
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  4. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    I think after that they could reach again the waterfall what they do in main story line. In that way, your story line will be conection with the main and could be part of canon. Because Lex is valube member of team, so they should stay tougether.
     
  5. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    And one more think about Samora. We have already two half-elfs what with three make it little too much, after what I thinking. What did you said for change her race to tiefling, like Annah from planescape torment or Neeska from neverwinter nights 2? She could have small horns and tail what make her more intresting. What do you think that idea habilon?
     
  6. habilon

    habilon Virgin CHYOA Backer

    Well it's not impossible to go with as in her main story... And this is a spoiler. .. she hunts a demon at one point and is beaten and cursed by him... So she does have demon powers later on... So I could work that to make her fantasy side a tiefling
     
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  7. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    Intresting idea.
     
  8. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    Guys I was thinking about magic and curses what often happen in fantasy settings and I go to conlusion. The curse should't be eternal, not by easy cost. Sure, some powerfull mage can curse another person let's say for few days, ewen weeks but cursing on whole life is too much. It could be done sure, but only after making special wagers, hight cost in subjects to do that, maybe ewen sacrifice of something important for mage throwing the curse... That kind of curse should be special and rare, It should't be using on any person who was mean to mage. What do you think about it guys?
     
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  9. habilon

    habilon Virgin CHYOA Backer

    Sounds good to me ^^
     
  10. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    And now, our story reach one hundret chapters! You all guys are great, I didn't do it without you!!!
     
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  11. gamer.1171

    gamer.1171 Virgin

    Hey all, recently read through the story and I'm looking to get involved with writing for this. I have a decent amount of experience, but find it hard to stay with projects so I'm thinking about trying something in this world you've created. I guess my basic Idea is that they get wrapped up in some sort of mystery involving a cult. Thoughts?
     
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  12. unisol_gr44

    unisol_gr44 CHYOA Guru

    Cults are always a great adventure in fantasy storis, so I’m all for it :)
     
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  13. hambo

    hambo Experienced

    Ahoyhoy.

    Anyone is welcome to add chapters to the path I'm working on. I figure Mira will get a 'sexy' punishment from her fairy controlled friends and a quick curse for ruining the fairy's home, but anything after that sounds like fair game to me.
     
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  14. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    Nice, what kind of curse do you planing?
     
  15. hambo

    hambo Experienced

    She'll feel unbelievably, insufferably hot whenever she wears clothes, thus forcing her to adventure/return to town completely naked until it wears off.
     
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  16. hambo

    hambo Experienced

    Or clothing makes her itchy/horny. Basically something that keeps her from getting dressed at all.
     
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  17. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    Ok guys, do you have something what you want to add to lore theme? Any wishes, suggestion, maybe someone noticed some mistake?
     
  18. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    By the way, I was thinking about halforcs and how to fit them in lore what make them more intresting. What did you said if child of orc and human will be growing up faster than normal child of any other race? In one year, It will reach hight of five/six years old child and in six/seven will be hight and muscles of mature human? After that, halforc will be słów down his growing up.
     
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  19. hambo

    hambo Experienced

    I'm fine with having them mature/grow up quicker, but maybe just make them do it a little quicker than humans, instead of a lot?
     
  20. Regin34

    Regin34 CHYOA Guru

    I was thinking about getting one of our girls pregnant in the future and that way should give them more option.