Beastmen Rising

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by TigrisSeductor, Feb 4, 2015.

  1. Hello, I am Tigris Seductor (pretentious Latin name is pretentious), and I've been browsing Chyoo since the spring of 2014, when I first stumbled upon the Lilith Strain stories that kinda drove me crazy; I really liked the ideas of sexual transformation and corruptive seduction (not sure how else to describe the... thing that happen in LS) that were explored in the series (AFAIK there are several independent Lilith Strain stories on both this Chyoo, the old Chyoo, and other websites like Unending BE, and the only thing they share in common is the whole idea of people transforming into sex demons). I've been browsing this website since then, and especially liked its fantastic stories, like Aaralon and the Demonic Idol. Somehow fantasy makes everything sexy.

    Now in 2015 I decided to try my own hand in writing a story on Chyoo (luckily I have some experience with that - I write a lot), channeling my teenage fantasies into Beastmen Rising: a story similar to Lilith Strain but with my own twist on it.

    Here is the link

    The essential idea is quite similar - a dark goddess corrupting people transforming them into sexy monsters - but instead of demons, they turn into... beast-like creatures somewhere inbetween what counts as "furry" and what counts as "nekomimi" (think pictures below). Also, I am planning to focus on the way sexual transformation liberates its victims, changing them according to their own hidden desires and revealing said desires to the world. So far this has only been shown with Jacqueline and her shyness and anxiety, but if the story turns out to be successful, I am going to add more such scenarios; perhaps a closeted lesbian who gets some "help" with coming out or a shy girl with a crush on a popular guy transformed into a horny dominatrix who takes the boy she wants by force... you get the point.

    I've only just started making the story but seeing that I got a lot of 5/5s it seems that people like it. To those who didn't see it yet; are there any problems with any aspect of the story so far (the scenes, the premise, the writing - mine is rather overwrought) and is there anything else I need to fix or add? Any suggestions?

    (Also, pardon my English if there are any typos or awkward grammar. Let's just say I live in a place where most people around me barely know any English at all.)
     

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  2. Updates have arrived! So far, this is the first non-protagonist transformation in the story. More are soon to follow!
     
  3. My apologies for not updating the story recently, my life has taken an unexpected turn, so to speak. Any feedback? What would you guys like to see?
     
  4. Sorry for a long wait. New section available!
     
  5. Any more feedback?
     
  6. Simon_Silver

    Simon_Silver Guest

    I would have something to say, except this sort of story is not one I enjoy, and would advise you to look at your feedback section under the 'manage stories' menu, which does not alert you when you have new feedback.
     
  7. New chapters!
    Is anyone willing to collaborate?
     
  8. Seriously? Does not anyone like transforming beastmen?
     
  9. Kobe

    Kobe Experienced

    Hey there!

    This isn't necessarily my kind of story, but I hate seeing someone look for feedback and collaborations and not get them.

    Look man. I'm all for people getting into Chyoa so that it becomes a really well received site. And I want you to become a part of Chyoa! But, I don't think many people (at least on this forum) who are into transforming beastmen.

    So, what do we gotta do about this?

    Well, for starters, reach out to people. People who you know are into the same stuff you're into! Go to furry forums, post a link to your story there! I'm sure you're bound to generate not only feedback, but collaborations as well.

    But if there's one thing I could tell you other than that:

    Don't give up. Don't write for the notion that you want popularity or page views or likes, write because you want to write. We all have a story in us, so why not get it out there? Fuck it man. Write for yourself. Be proud of yourself. Because at the end of the day -- who's there? Us? Or you? Look man, my story Senior Year could have gotten no likes, no traction, nothing. But I'd still get it down because I've always wanted to have a story like this, and Chyoa has filled that niche in my system. Of course likes and comments and feedback encourage you and make you want to write more, but it shouldn't be the main driving force! You had an idea, so you wrote it down. Don't drop it and quit because no one has offered criticism or collaborations. And if you want criticism and collaborations, post your Chyoa story onto a different forum where Furries and Nekomimi are well received, get their feedback, and maybe one or two of them are willing to make an account on Chyoa and help you with it.

    As always, happy fapping.

    -Kobe
     
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  10. chris_brown

    chris_brown Really Experienced

    are any chapters in the pipeline?
     
  11. Definitely.
     
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  12. JMW

    JMW Guest

    Great story, really enjoy it. Am planning on adding a few chapters at some point, just busy with Demonic Incursion and Futa Contagion at the moment. Keep up the good work.
     
  13. Myst

    Myst Guest

    I initally planned for a few more chapters, following the inital Panther transformation. Though, since I felt they were a little to divergent from the inital premise I'll need to rework them - shouldn't be an issue - and add a few in between chapters in the beginning. Already have the storyline roughly hewn out that I'm working towards.

    Do you have any particular recommendations or suggestions for introducing an organization/order dedicated to hunting the weres. Although, they're propably more stewards than hunters at this point in time in the story. Personally, I'm liking repeater crossbows with an optional wide brimmed hat and leather coat.

    Also would like to offer a thanks for setting up the story and its premise, I've very muched enjoyed reading it.