Daddy Dearest

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Swallows999, Apr 20, 2017.

  1. Swallows999

    Swallows999 Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Hey guys, haven't made one of these in awhile. Story in question: https://chyoa.com/chapter/Introduction.327517

    The main reason why I'm posting is because I want to gauge how people feel about having pictures for this story. As it stands, other than the cover I do not have pictures which is a sharp contrast to my other stories.

    I am interested in finding out if people would want me to add pictures. The girl most likely to be used is the same as the cover picture, Elsa Jean.

    Also feel free to post other feedback here.
     
  2. Loeman

    Loeman Really Really Experienced

    I find initial pictures welcome, but series of pictures can be distracting.

    One thing I might find distracting about a picture series is that the guy in the cover picture is black. I would keep consistency in that if you have a picture series, and include race as a part of the story background somewhere if that's a consistent theme.
     
  3. Swallows999

    Swallows999 Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    God damn it, I knew I should've picked a different cover picture. That guy is actually white, but when I cropped it, I was like "What the fuck, this guy's dick is really dark... Oh well." https://www.pornpics.com/galleries/...a-jean-swallowing-cum-after-blowing-big-cock/
     
  4. Loeman

    Loeman Really Really Experienced

    Lulz!

    Yeah that's one dark dick for a white guy.
     
  5. Nympho Manic

    Nympho Manic Virgin

    I like the amount of detail went into this story. Sometimes its a bit quick to in the story. I see a massive amount of good detail. You very clearly detailed what is taking place. Entire story is erotic so major plus up.
     
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