Hello, I would like to thank the creators of the website for giving us a way to share our stories with others. So, I hope that some people can check my story: https://chyoa.com/story/Dirty-Me.9073 Especially, I hope to get constructive criticism. Not on (I wish you would extend this more), but on what I am doing right and wrong, since my English seems to be getting worse the longer I live in a non-English speaking country. What is immersive? What pulls you out of the story? What is right? What is wrong? What can I do better? My goal is to become a better writer.
You're using the wrong POV, if this is a story of your past, it should be written from the first person, with words like 'I' 'My' and 'mine'
Um... Based on parts of my life, aka writing from my personal experiences, but it isn't an autobiography. Not everything in it is something I have experienced, and not everything that is based on my personal experiences is written to complete accuracy. That is why it is based on the character "Dirty Me". So not sure why I would use a different point of view. Does that clarify? So, what did you think of it?
