Faith's Bad Weekend

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by 2p1k3, Oct 19, 2014.

  1. 2p1k3

    2p1k3 Experienced

    Faith's Bad Weekend
    ~ Town hottie home alone ~
    I have enjoyed the story as it has grown since it started on chyoo.com. While giving the reader lots of sex, I enjoy how most of the authors have explored the character's as dynamic sapiens instead of static objects of the protagonist's lust; All while the protagonist actually does treat them as static objects for his lust, ironically. :)

    My Recent Submission
    In the event that what I wrote and recently submitted is approved, I wanted to explain the direction I had in mind. I wish to make it clear that I am intending to 'add' depth to the Pizza Delivery character as being more than just a Pizza Delivery character.

    I figure that the PD is a veteran who is attending the local community college such as Faith and Ashley. Delivery Pizza is a way of making some extra money though he chose to save most of his money while in the military and has a trust fund set up by his grandfather? The reason for this is establishing resources to support him fucking divinely beautiful and richly fertile teenager young women.

    The posts I wrote also elude to the protagonist targeting Faith and Ashley for more than just their bodies. Divinely beautiful richly fertile teenage young women are hardly unique in being that. The idea was that he has some currently undecided grudge against their parents for something they did to his own family, sibling, or parents. Therefore he wants to publicly humiliate them by the news listing their beautiful daughters, and or wife's, as getting knocked up.