Feedback on my additions to Stereotype Gun Tales

Hello. I just wanted to ask for bit of feedback. Especially from @Spindizzy since she is author of story. I was aiming for short intense stuff, lots of images. First time writing. How did I do?

Chapters:

• https://chyoa.com/chapter/Death-fucking-metal.567725 -> https://chyoa.com/chapter/Rought-Fucking-Sex.568047 -> https://chyoa.com/chapter/Think-about-the-metal-concert-poster.566518
  
• https://chyoa.com/chapter/A-sexy-black-skinned-girl.566567 -> https://chyoa.com/chapter/Trisha-finds-the-gun,-uses-it-on-Aaron.567687
• https://chyoa.com/chapter/Roberta,-local-firefighter.566607 -> https://chyoa.com/chapter/Her-relationship.566615 -> https://chyoa.com/chapter/He-remembers-something-about-some-sort-of-a-gun.566837

 

Hi Vod, I've been away for a bit so it was a delightful surprise to find all your additions to the story. Lots of fun ideas here and well executed. I particularly enjoyed the Metal girl thread. Feel free to PM me if you want to talk about it more