Hi All I'm Dansak, new to CHYOA and have posted my first story, The P.A. What do you think, any tips or things I should take note of? I've got a few likes and favourites etc and I'm dead pleased, I never thought anyone would read it. I'm curious what is considered to be a good amount of view/likes etc for a new story/first time story as I think I'm doing well but have nothing to base this on. So you know, I'm new to this type of site and a bit of a dumb ass with tech so please forgive me if I'm making obvious errors in posting, this is all new to me! And lastly, I've enjoyed writing this so much, I'm completely hooked and can't get my story and the characters out of my head! Is this normal?! Cheers Dansak
Ah, you remind me of me when I first started! It's a bit of a "honeymoon" phase- I remember I basically spent the first entire week writing for my story, breaking only to eat, work and sleep. There's the trepidation of being a long-time reader and finally mustering the courage to actually author something, but when the likes start pouring in and people enjoy your story, it makes it all worth it! I also saw that you wanted to add images to your story. I hope you stick with it, I'm one of the few people that uses a lot of images in my stories. My personal tip: Run the image through Microsoft Paint or something and crop the outer edges so that the main action is in view. Also, make sure to resize it in case it is too big/cumbersome.
I'm still struggling with the pic... got the pic online, but can't seem to get it to link. I'll get there soon though!
It should look something like this, --- There was a man in a village and his name was Jim. He was so ugly that everyone died.  Because the village was now deserted, Jim decided to go on an adventure. Hopefully, in the next village, no one dies. --- The imageurl would be the direct-link to your picture.
I'm also not sure if you use a word processor, but you should look into using one. Microsoft Word, OpenOffice, or even Googledocs. Your introduction is missing a lot of punctuation. Third paragraph, second to last line, "She has shoulder length light brown hair and a bust that seems about medium sized that you'd love to get a better look at." There are missing words in this sentence, which I have bolded and underlined. There's some other issues, but it can be easily fixed if you run your chapters through a spelling/grammer check.
Pro-tip: when asking for feedback on a story: include a link to the story you are asking for feedback on...
