Gorel's story feedback

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by gorel29, Jun 4, 2018.

  1. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    Heyo, Hello.

    I've posted a few stories I had over at Superstories.net.

    If anyone is interested in adding to them or have ideas for directions they'd like them to go, just give me a shout.
     
  2. Spindizzy

    Spindizzy Really Experienced

    Could you post links?
     
  3. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

  4. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    I've added a bit for Fantast Four; Strange Appetites. Essentially the plot is similar to a comic I've commissioned called 'Life Changes' where a couple find a meteorite and bring it inside with plans to sell it. Long story short the radiation it gives off turns them into giant four armed reptile/armadillo monsters that literally eat themselves out of house and home and roll out into the city. In this, the Fantastic Four bring back a radioactive stone that does the same thing, making them eat and grow and change so long as they are within proximity to the rock. If anyone is interested in adding to the story be my guest, I love story interactions. also if you need to see the comic for an idea of what's going on, here are the links. http://www.furaffinity.net/view/24287107/ and http://www.furaffinity.net/view/27094208/
     
  5. bob10

    bob10 Virgin

  6. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    I might post them on CHYOA in time, whether I finish them or not is up for debate.
     
  7. bob10

    bob10 Virgin

    First, thank you for posting more stories on chyoa, always nice to read them again. Second I have an idea about a story : " a spaceship had a problem while orbiting a planet (either Earth or another Earth-like planet). Various peoples crash-landed with escape pods. It could be normal peoples or supers (although I'm don't know a lot about comics). They ended up in different Biome (desert, jungle, ocean, volcanic area, sea ice ... and slowly change into animals/monster being adapted to their environment." What do you think?
     
  8. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    I like the idea, I might do a story like that.
     
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  9. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    I guess the major question is do you want it to be serious or funny? Because one direction is they crash on the planet, eat the local fruit and grow/mutate into kaiju until the rest of the crew find them.
     
  10. bob10

    bob10 Virgin

    Personally I prefer the serious version
     
  11. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    At the very least I'll be adding to Fantastic Four strange Appetites if anyone wants to add some themselves.
     
  12. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    As for the monsterization of the fantastic Four and their allies I'm always up for going COMPLETELY over the top!!! Whether they become a horde of monsters, expand into kaiju... Or become planet eating space monsters that eventually nom the galaxy... Reader's choice.
     
  13. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    If anyone has any ideas or thoughts of adding to Satyr Silliness or Fantastic Four; Strange Appetites just let me know.
     
  14. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    Have you considered taking the Monsterized Fantastic Four to Monster Island? Might be interesting to give them a chance to "interact" with some of the classic Marvel monsters, and possibly the Mole Man. I'm sure Fin Fang Foom wouldn't mind getting Susan Storm alone on the side of the volcano, if you know what I mean.
     
  15. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    Heh, might be fun.
     
  16. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    So, looks like our heroes had popped out a few bundles of joy. Should they grow up to be feral or intelligent?
     
  17. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    I'm going to recommend intelligent, if only because having non-intelligent critters in sexual situations might trip the bestiality alarm for some readers.
     
  18. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    Fair enough, I had a couple directions for the arc. The Fantastic Four are dumped on monster island and find a way to get back to normal (or close to it) or things snow ball to the point where they become moon sized kaiju nomming what's left of the Earth and commenting "Shucks... Self control is HARD!"
     
  19. gorel29

    gorel29 Experienced

    SO! Trapped on a desert island with only themselves for company with a bottomless pit for an appetite and a hair trigger sex drive... I smell a sitcom!
     
  20. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    If you want to continue the transformation route, they could take on the attributes of the critters they fuck - which, if they could find some humans, might make them more human. Or if they find some monsters...