I need some advice on a chapter.

Discussion in 'General Board' started by Whatsa, Nov 11, 2019.

  1. Whatsa

    Whatsa Guest

    So I wrote a chapter where a girl walks over to Venice beach at night, hoping that it would cool her off because of the hot weather. However, the air is saturated, making it even hotter. Would it make sense for her to continue walking?
     
  2. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    If there's a breeze, she might walk into that; or if it promises rain. Or if she wants to strip down and jump into the ocean.
     
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