[*Inside The Game*] * (Contributions Welcome!) *

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Nemo of Utopia, Nov 1, 2017.

  1. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    This is my newest story and I'm hoping to make it huge! This has a very simple premise, you get sucked into a Video Game, and have to try to survive it...

    Link for those Interested

    Thus far we have had submissions accepted from three authors besides myself, and I'm hoping for more.

    An especial thanks go out to: GenericEditor168 and LizIsBest who worked with me on the story BEFORE it was published.

    Currently the story is almost 30 chapters deep and I expect it will get a lot deeper!

    Everyone please go check it out and leave any comments you may have either here or on the chapters of the story: I'll be checking both religiously...
     
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  2. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    I've decided to post a thread in the story which involves a [Quest] element, but have not gotten any votes, so I figured I might as well toss it up here:


    SPORE: cell stage.
     
  3. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

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    This is the image I want to use to post the next chapter of the MoO2 story, but Im just not sure how to put it in on the main site...
     
  4. GenericEditor168

    GenericEditor168 Really Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

  5. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Thanks, GE, you're the best!
     
  6. GenericEditor168

    GenericEditor168 Really Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Might I suggest, if you can find one, a sexier cover image, or at least a more "active" one (as in, not just a group of icons)?
     
  7. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    I think that's a good IDEA, but it would involve finding one that is both Sexy and portrays the theme of the story adequately...

    EDIT: If anyone else wants to submit suggestions for such a cover image, I'm quite open to the idea...
     
  8. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    I have once again gotten to a quest chapter in the SPORE storyline, and am looking for input: if anyone interested in the quest type stories could post a comment HERE, that would be appreciated.
     
  9. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Hi again everyone. I am stuck on THIS chapter in my main MoO2 storyline, so I'm asking for recommendations: if you were playing MoO2 would you hire sparky or not?
     
  10. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    "The time has come" the walrus said, "to talk of other things, of Bats, and Cats, and Elfshot's Gear, of Zombie Babes and Kings: of how the fungus grows underground, and weather 'Steve' has Wings...!"

    Confused? Follow my new dream inspired storyline from the beginning HERE...
     
  11. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Well, the story is finally starting to get some traction with other authors, you can see their fresh work HERE, HERE, HERE, and HERE...
     
    Last edited: May 8, 2018
  12. brevdravis

    brevdravis Really Really Experienced

    Thanks for approving so fast! Been enjoying this so far and look forward to doing more.
     
  13. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    I too have been enjoying your contributions, but please read the PM I sent you about the relative degree of immersion you are achieving...
     
  14. Thorn_

    Thorn_ CHYOA Guru

    Oh, I feel like I want to get in on contributing for this for the time being until I completely forget about it. That cool?
     
  15. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Which the contributing or the forgetting? The Contributing is great, the forgetting is unfortunate, but both are 'cool' in the sense that I'm not going to give you any flack for them, losing an idea you had for a story is just one of those things that happens sometimes.
     
  16. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    A SERIOUS CHANGE: VOTING AND FEEDBACK

    Hello everyone, this is something I'm not comfortable doing without feedback from the readers, but I'm almost convinced would improve the story:

    I'm thinking of completely reworking the user input variables in the story.

    In one of my other stories, I made the user input variables default to "Personal Middle Family", and I think it improved the story greatly, because with no default name you got no preconceptions about what that character would look like, sound like, act like, etcetera.

    I think if we don't do this soon it will be almost impossible to do: it's already going to be hidiously difficult, but I want to hear from the readers and especualy other writers, do you think this would be a positive change?

    If you read this, PLEASE, I beg of you, respond!

    Even if you've never read the story, just think for a second and decide if you think making the reader put in a name of thier own for the protagonist is a good idea or not...

    Link for those Interested

     
    Last edited: Jun 8, 2018
  17. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Well, with only two responses on the story itself both of which were basically "Meh" and none here, It seems variables update is go!
     
  18. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Well, from all the way back on page 4, if it weren't a rule that we should only have one thread per story, I'd have started a new one.

    Anyway, this post is to announce that sometime in the past month or so, quietly and with little fanfare until now, this story crossed the 1000 likes mark!
     
  19. moonblack

    moonblack CHYOA Guru

    Congratulations on Story of the Week!
     
  20. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    I know, right? I didn't even know it had happened until I logged in and suddenly my notifications were like sixty items long...!