Hello all. Here's my story. http://chyoa.com/story/laboratory-fun/cover It's a story set in the present and revolves around a long term sexy friend and a science lab where new experiments are taking place. The reader is placed into situations where they are able to explore new body sensations as well as possible relationships and sexual acts. So, I've been working on this one for a little bit now. I've got some more paths I want to nail down and I really feel like I've only barely started exploring the possibilities. How do you think it should develop? Any experiment ideas? Should there be more relational dialogue / character building? I'm very new to writing, especially the whole cyoa style. I think I left good spots for story arcs to split for choices. I'd like to see some people contribute new ideas too. I'd love any feedback, positive or negative. Personally, I have a few concerns. There's no real plot. There's the underpinnings of maaaaaybe a plot, but really I think it needs a good plot to drive the story. I think I may be spending too much time on the actual sex acts. Like the descriptions of what's going on. But part of me thinks that because it's an erotic story website, why not. And because the story includes what are supposed to be new sensations, it demands more descriptions. Though, I've read quite a few other stories here and in other places and it feels like a lot of those just barely scratch the surface of the sex. I think it takes too long to get to some of the action. From the intro to getting into the actual lab... it takes a while. But I think I originally wanted a way to build the underlying relationship background more between the reader and the friend as well as being able to add more characters. But then part of me says, where's the sexy part? Get to the sexy part! I put a bit of dom/sub into most all the sexy bits. I think that's just a personal thing to add a little more excitement and maybe I should move more neutral in that respect. There's a spot where I play with the whole hypnotic trance thing... I could take it or leave it personally, but I've seen really good examples previously that actually work. I think it needs more refining to put the reader into a good trance and I do want that in there somewhere... I think I'll have to keep toying with it.
I think we all have our own styles. I think you can't help but feel pressure to cram in sex scenes even when you are not ready in terms of the story. I like to justify everything which can mean it can take time to get around to the action. Then when you get to the sex acts just do what feels natural so detailed, or quick and dirty, it does not really matter so long as you feel comfortable. I have written 3 types of story: one which stands on its own but people can add to if they want; one which offers directions to jump off into; one which is just a setup which I want others to develop. My next story will be one which I doubt anyone will want to add to and I suppose is more of an attempt at erotic novel ... but still under the pressure of the site's expectations there might be slightly more sex than is necessary for the story.
