I created this post to receive feedback on "Leona", an erotic story about a young model who is searching for money, pleasure and fame in her career. I'm writing as a web series script, which sometimes may not please everyone. But besides enjoying the format, I think this gives the narrative more agility and lets the imagination flow freely. I have a story line in development for the next few episodes, but I'm open to new ideas. And as I explained in the introduction to the story, if you have an idea for a prequel or spin-off, we can talk about it and add it to the plot. I would like to receive constructive opinions and suggestions on the history and format. Thanks for the reading! (Link to "Leona": https://chyoa.com/story/Leona.15341)
You are right in that it isn't everybody's type of format. You are lucky that it is a format I am familiar with, even though I haven't done a story like it I can read it fairly well. I will say that it makes the story move along faster in this format. If I was to make one adjustment it would be more details into the locations and people's actions.
This format looks like something new and unique to this site. I'm afraid that it doesn't seem to be my cup of tea, but i hope you find an audience for it.
