https://chyoa.com/story/Let's-Survive.15126 So, I recently made a new story as from the thread and the link above, points out. As it stands, it's not an in depth story yet. Still, I want to know people's thoughts on how this story is currently developing. There's not currently much in the way of outright sex scenes yet, but it is building to that. There's not a lot to say about it so far, other then I will try to keep a fairly well rounded expansion of chapters, but I'd like to know if anyone has any preferences on a specific character that they want more of on their branches. I'm also not opposed to making new characters but want at least some work done in each route before I go on to the next. Any feedback is appreciated. I also plan on diversifying content in the future. If you have any thoughts on how it's going, or what I'm doing wrong, or just general things to comment about it, don't hesitate to do it.
I just read the first line story, and I have to say it's an intriguing concept, but I'm not liking the semi-non-con aspects I am seeing and from the titles, I saw in the story map I think it's only going to get worse the deeper I dive into the story. I was all set to be super excited about the Otaku character, and I must admit I even Squeed at the introduction of him, but that went away quickly as I realized you were not writing him like the dangerously genre savvy individual he would realistically be. Instead, you're going with the 'book smart but not really smart' trope which I hate. Moreover, you seem to be angling towards the 'everyone who watches hentai is a rapist' trope, AND the 'all girls are secret sluts' trope: both of which I despise. Now: for recommendations: Idea 1: he DOES get a 'closer look': The Pixy murders him for it: AKA "It's A TRAP!!!" Idea 2: He acts the gentelman, and though he's kinda a perv (Honestly, at some level, so's 90% of the human race, we just restrain ourselves...) and runs to colect his friends and start getting ready for the huge disaster that's about to go down at a frantic pace: because, in this version: he IS "Dangerously Genre Savvy" he's played this game, he knows the rules: and he's going to bend them into a pretzle to save as many people as he can! More posts will be forthcoming as I delve deeper into the story...
Just read the Keito SL, must say it's more fast-paced: but, the darker aspects of it still leave me with doubts. BTW, what Game, Manga, or Anime is this based on?
It would be a lot of stuff to quote for things that you just said, so...: 1. Alex isn't so much stupid as it's just adaption. I suspect most people would have some confusion to just suddenly be thrown into something without any real warning. He's probably a bit of a perv, but again. Lot's of people are. 2. Keito is pretty much meant to be a total dick in secret. The way I want to engineer it is that a lot of stuff won't end up going his way. Doesn't mean everything will backfire for him. It's also possible to make him gradually become less of an asshole, but I probably wouldn't do it with just a sudden one page, heel-face turn. 3. Outright non-con, isn't a thing that I would write. I do find it more realistic however, to not treat all encounters with instant and obsessive enthusiasm. If well written, this can build anticipation. But full non-con just isn't a thing that I would write. I don't advocate it. Maybe some scenes where there's base reluctance, but that's about as far as it goes. 4. It's based on the Shin Megami Tensei game series. The games themselves, while good, contain some really messed up moments. There would honestly be too many to list to here. The series is pretty well known for being Nintendo Hard(I've had more than a few meltdown moments.) Mine is primarily based on the Devil Survivor series, and also the version that I'm basing the stats and levels of demons and characters on.
Is that a technical term? (Because, having played the original Super Mario Bros, I understand completely.) Having read a bit into the source material I'm quite interested in your concept, but I have serious issues with your allowance of non-con: If you were willing to take mind control and outright non-consent/'dubious'-consent off the table I have an idea in mind for a new character, (A second female path, to be specific.) and some alternate routes for some of the other things you've posted...
If you were willing to take mind control and outright non-consent/'dubious'-consent off the table I have an idea in mind for a new character, (A second female path, to be specific.) and some alternate routes for some of the other things you've posted...[/QUOTE] Edited guidelines to state sex must remain consensual. Now I feel like a jerk for bumping up my own thread.
NOW I'm bumping: because I just wrote the first chapter of a new character option and wanted your feedback...
