Loss of control: Alicia https://chyoa.com/story/Perdida-de-control:-Alicia.31537 Hello, I am a new writer of the page and I have published my first story. I am not the best writer in the world but I want to improve little by little along with my stories./ Loss of control is a series that I begin with this first installment. Alicia, our protagonist, is a millionaire girl thanks to her parents who live abroad working without resting. Everything is normal in her life, but over time she will make incorrect decisions and will make different enemies, it may be her maid, her best friend, the loser who proposed to be her boyfriend, or a super secret group. I have created the story as a game, I hope that in a few months I will be able to finish it. I know, it is in Spanish, but it costs nothing to translate it from the page with the google translator. (I do that with stories in English when reading is difficult for me) . I listen to your suggestions and ideas for this first story./-
I wouldn't exactly say it costs nothing to translate the page in google translate, because it is an extra step and a barrier to entry into the story. I'll be honest and add that I wouldn't have thought that without you mentioning it. Also isn't exactly mobile friendly and also on desktop it requires you to read in an comfortable format. Not saying anything bad about writing in your own language, if it's what you enjoy and feel more comfortable with, you should definitely do that, but just be aware the story is less accessible. I'll give the translation a try, but I think some translation errors might affect any meaningful feedback
