Hello friends, I very recently found the CHYOA forum button! I am posting to see if anyone has feedback or criticism that they'd like to share for my first story. I am open to suggestions so please do tell! Link to story: https://chyoa.com/story/Magical-Manipulations.9618
Since you've set the story up as 2nd person with no specific back story for the character, why not allow for the option to play as a woman? Or a non-human character, since you're using an essentiall D&D type setting?
Interesting point! Someone mentioned in my new story, "Humans and Homesteads" that a female protagonist may be an interesting path. I'll still considering how I would approach it. I have a few ideas in my head, maybe have a heterosexual woman that can stop time and has sex with frozen men, maybe has a lesbian version of that as well. The person that commented in "Humans and Homesteads" specifically pointed out that there we no information if a woman were to put her finger or hand through the "mind control" portal. As for non-human characters, I do have plans on making a classico Japanese story of an orc or goblin that can stop time and uses it to go to town on women, but I think I will create a separate story for that at a later date. I currently have a third story in the works that contains interspecies sex (Orcs/Goblins/Ogres/Slimes/etc) that I plan on releasing in the coming weeks. As a side note, I appreciate your input! I was starting to think no one was going to comment on this ever. Makes me sad that people dislike chapters without telling me what they want me to improve!
