Morgan's Lunch Break

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Ben Rosewood, Dec 6, 2018.

  1. Ben Rosewood

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  2. Fierbali111

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    A bit fast paced for me, though you do manage to build up a decent setting and don't do the mortal sin of listing the characters attributes like some stories do. The sex scenes are also pretty quick.
     
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  3. Ben Rosewood

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    Admittedly that was the intention of the story for it to be a rush.
     
  4. Fierbali111

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    Ah, good to know.