Nemesis

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Azunaswift, Jul 1, 2015.

  1. Azunaswift

    Azunaswift Virgin

    Hey everyone. I saw that most of the successful stories on chyoa have a thread here, so I'm creating one hoping that my own will join their ranks!

    http://chyoa.com/story/nemesis/cover

    It's currently set to private while I set up the scene and backstory, but I'll open it up eventually to the public once the setting is fleshed out.

    While the basic premise is that you're a prisoner stuck in the dungeon of an evil wizard, I'll be expanding story paths such as:

    * He'll take you on adventures with him to the outside world, involving exploration, dungeon crawling, sex with fantastical races and public humiliation.
    * He'll eventually force you to help him abduct and corrupt other important people, e.g the head of the church and members of the royal family.
    * You'll be an unwilling dungeon keeper, helping your captor defend his dungeon against adventurers by killing/capturing them.
    * One path will be entirely focused on flashbacks/memories of your past to establish the backstory. It won't be too linear as your memories will often be invaded by Dream Flayers: demons that torment sleeping victims by taking the forms of their fears...and desires.

    Finally, any feedback/comments/criticisms on my writing and story ideas are welcome, and would be appreciated.
     
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