I thought I would Ask if anyone had any ideas or complaints about wat I've been writing so far. Admittedly know that there currently has not been much to read. Currently, my plan is to write mainly around a small cast of characters from many perspectives, while allowing myself or anyone else (hint. hint) to add more or less anything they want to later. The goal is to offer a slightly softer MC story that has characters stay the same but has them react differently throughout various actions that happen throughout various paths to keep things as non-linear as possible. All work right now is focused toward a family of a mother, father, and two daughters and after I get past the expositional phase it should get a lot more sexual but I want to have branching paths that give exposition that only in those paths to get a bit more replayability out of it. Admittedly I do need one vital piece of advice. How the hell do you make multiple chapters end up at the same point. The plan is to have an upcoming chapter create a lot of variables and then these lead back to a slightly more linear story with a few moments or entire chapter where events happen differently by using variables to lock out all but one option.
I would suggest you focus more on the relationship of your two main characters. The dynamic of the one trying to learn from the error of his ways while the other is attempting to corrupt him into continue to abuse his powers is where your true drama will come from. Don't worry about the sex it will come. It's better to have less sex that is exciting and provocative than a lot of boring pornographic sex. I was a bit confused by some of your sentences. I suggest running your stuff through an online grammar editor like Grammarly. Finally, something I suggest for every author read this. It will help tremendously with your plotting. I've read it at least four times as of writing this and try to reread it at least once a month. Happy writings and happy endings
I somewhat agree with what gcrinehart2223 said, in respect to the fact that you should focus on the relationship between the two main characters, but i think that you should keep in mind that Jessie's role in the relationship is to keep Tim from abusing his powers. I'm not saying that she can't/shouldn't push him to both explore and to find the limits of his abilities and that they shouldn't have fun; just keep in mind that her role is to make sure that he dosen't abuse his abilities and the people that he uses them on. Good luck and happy writing.
