Noble's Court

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by entropy50607, Aug 25, 2016.

  1. entropy50607

    entropy50607 Virgin

    Hi, I'm posting this thread to give my first story more publicity, Noble's Court.

    I have 2 intentions for this thread:
    1. If you find grammartical errors, spelling errors and/or inconsistencies, please inform me and I will correct them, thank you.
    2. And if you have any ideas and/or suggestions, feel free to post them here.


    Thank you.
     
  2. entropy50607

    entropy50607 Virgin

    The story has now been updated, Noble's Court 2.0.

    I apologize for the temporary inconvenience.
     
  3. Artican

    Artican Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    grammartical <-- grammatical ;)
     
  4. entropy50607

    entropy50607 Virgin

    I keep making these mistakes, thanks for pointing them out.

    I sincerely hope my story is safe from all this.
     
  5. Artican

    Artican Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    What's the story about? I would assume from the title it's about a tennis player named Noble, but I could be wrong. Any intended future story lines you're planning for it?
     
  6. entropy50607

    entropy50607 Virgin

    The story is essentially about the lives of various characters in a fantasy world that is increasingly turbulent, currently, I only have 1 character, as the story is in its early developments.

    The character is a male, and is the King of a city called Trupia.
     
  7. Omega98

    Omega98 CHYOA Guru

    I have to say I'm loving the story line with the very dominant yet loving mother and the protagonist's "sealed" climaxes. Brilliant!
     
  8. reader230

    reader230 Virgin

    ^ What he said. Just saw it for the first time today and love your work so far. Keep it up!